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serogers32   
Sep 4, 2010
Undergraduate / Strong sense of obstinacy best describes me. MIT [9]

In your second draft, you talk about working on the "Diffraction Grating" experiment. Is this a common experiment? I'm not all that familiar with science, but I think you should elaborate on this point. Develop a voice! Try re-writing this more colloquially, how you'd talk with your friends. Then, go back and see how you can change the essay you have now to better show your personality. In an essay, the school wants to see the side of you that isn't portrayed on your transcript. Judging by the fact that you're applying to MIT, you're probably a serious student. Show them your personality that isn't portrayed on paper!

"They show enlightened after my tutor." Do you mean "They show enlightenment after my tutoring? "

Just some thoughts... I hope this helps! Don't be afraid to show a less serious side of yourself. After all, admissions counselors will be reading hundreds of applications. Yours should stand out :)
serogers32   
Aug 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / Favorite song - Kitto Mata Itsuka [4]

My favorite music is Kitto Mata Itsuka,it was sing by Depapepesung by Depapepe . This song didn't have any lyrics, it's just only a melody that made from 2two guitars. Kitto Mata Itsuka is Japanese languagein Japanese . Kitto means really, Mata means is,and Itsuka means lonely or sad. So Kitto Mata Itsuka means it was really lonely or sadWhen put together, Kitto Mata Itsuka stands for "it was really sad" . Dapapepe was from Japanis from Japan and is made up of only two membersThis band has only 2 members , Their name were Depa-San and Pepe-San, this is source is the band of this band.named Depa-San and Pepe-San If you have a chance to listen to this band, you will love it. It's kind of J pop music. If you ever listen to this songband once, you'll come back and listen toitthem again. Any songs from Depapepe are suitable for listen in the morning, on the beach, chill out in car while you are driving, or after you have got any problem in your life. you justL isten to these songs and pay atteningattention.L et your heart flew intoflow with the song. It will help you feel better. They also have other top hit songs such as a " Start" , " Wedding B ell" ,and" This Way." If you looking for good music try to listen to this band. They won't be disappoint you.

Hope this helps!
serogers32   
Aug 5, 2010
Undergraduate / Purdue Essay - "Superwoman" [3]

This is the essay I plan to submit to Purdue University. Here's the prompt: "What are the qualities of a good leader? Use examples from your personal experiences to illustrate your particular leadership style."

Leadership is the ability to multitask - to effectively take on a myriad of distinct personas and use each to accomplish a goal. Taking on a leadership role means being an authority figure, a diplomat, a teacher, a student, a coach and superwoman all at once. A leader understands her team, role, power and most of all, herself.

As editor-in-chief of my high school newspaper, I march into school every day to manage an 80-person staff, leaving my problems and any negative attitude at the door. Knowing how to separate personal issues from business is vital for any leader. If I walk into the newspaper room unmotivated and preoccupied, the staff will feel the same way. Attitudes become contagious when working as a team, and proficient leaders can put aside individual predicaments for the betterment of everyone. Even though I hold a leadership position, I cannot put out a paper by myself. As a leader, I have to work harder and love what I do more so than anyone else on staff.

I walk a thin line between being a friend and a voice of authority to my peers on a daily basis. The best leaders know that mastering the former balancing act takes years of practice and fine-tuning. Working in a field that deals with deadlines and criticism on a daily basis, I have to teach, coach and learn in every situation. Dealing out criticism is often harder than accepting it. While perfection is unattainable, there is always room for improvement. Superior leaders recognize the opportunity for improvement and learn with every mistake or mishap. In these instances I am not only a teacher, but also a student and a coach, learning more about my peers and myself.

Managing an award-winning high school newspaper with a circulation of over 4,500 requires me to be organized, innovative, patient and flexible. Organization is necessary to manage all aspects of the paper, including every staff member. Innovation allows me to keep things fresh, facing new problems with creativity and good spirits. Handling deadlines, mishaps and minute details requires patience. A lot of it. In the end, something can always go wrong. Nothing is set in stone, and flexibility helps leave room for error even with deadlines lurking in the very near future.

Every leader must face each day with an open mind and a renewed passion for her work. I have to juggle between being the bad guy, a therapist, a problem-solver and superwoman. Efficient leaders know when to use and how to balance each aspect. Knowing and accepting this, I strive to personify Vince Lombardi's quote, "If you chase perfection, you will catch excellence." After all, I am superwoman.
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