stomnus
Aug 7, 2010
stomnus
Aug 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay:the disvantages of cars [6]
hi! i'm parcticing ielts eaaay.please give some advice. Thank you
topic:
The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?
content:
With the increasing use of cars, many severe problems have arisen, such as air pollution, high energy consumption, car accidents etc.
I think the biggest issue should be air pollution. The air pollution from cars is mainly caused by fuel emissions. Increased cars use causes more greenhouse gases to get emitted into the atmosphere; this traps more and more of the earth's heat, causing an overall warming to the planet's temperature. Since 1850, the eight warmest recorded years have all occurred since 1998. At the same time, fuel emissions such as carbon monoxide have a negative effect on blood and organs of the body. A new survey points out that carbon monoxide basically suffocates a person to death. The gas also intensifies cardiovascular disease in humans.
However, automobiles also bring many benefits to our life. When you have your own car, you can go wherever you want, whenever you want, without being dependent on anyone else. So measures should be taken to solve these problems. For example, we can tap new energy to replace fossil fuel, such as solar energy, wind power, hydropower, etc. Currently, many car makers have rolled out green cars powered by electricity. Though there are lots of drawbacks in this type of car. But I think with the development of technology, these technical difficulties will be worked out.
Additionally, the government should carry out laws to limit car emissions, and advocate pubic transport. I believe that the advantages of cars, in the long run, will outweigh its disadvantages.
hi! i'm parcticing ielts eaaay.please give some advice. Thank you
topic:
The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?
content:
With the increasing use of cars, many severe problems have arisen, such as air pollution, high energy consumption, car accidents etc.
I think the biggest issue should be air pollution. The air pollution from cars is mainly caused by fuel emissions. Increased cars use causes more greenhouse gases to get emitted into the atmosphere; this traps more and more of the earth's heat, causing an overall warming to the planet's temperature. Since 1850, the eight warmest recorded years have all occurred since 1998. At the same time, fuel emissions such as carbon monoxide have a negative effect on blood and organs of the body. A new survey points out that carbon monoxide basically suffocates a person to death. The gas also intensifies cardiovascular disease in humans.
However, automobiles also bring many benefits to our life. When you have your own car, you can go wherever you want, whenever you want, without being dependent on anyone else. So measures should be taken to solve these problems. For example, we can tap new energy to replace fossil fuel, such as solar energy, wind power, hydropower, etc. Currently, many car makers have rolled out green cars powered by electricity. Though there are lots of drawbacks in this type of car. But I think with the development of technology, these technical difficulties will be worked out.
Additionally, the government should carry out laws to limit car emissions, and advocate pubic transport. I believe that the advantages of cars, in the long run, will outweigh its disadvantages.
