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daressa_howard   
Aug 8, 2010
Graduate / Life Decision - narrative of why I will like to be a Physician Assistant [8]

I liked your essay! It painted a picture for me, and your reasoning for wanting to become a P.A. is extraordinary. However i do feel as though parts of your essay are a tad bit repetitive. For example: in the final paragraph you stated more than once that you wanted to help people. My suggestion will be to state that in different ways or put more details on the path your going to take in helping others.
daressa_howard   
Aug 8, 2010
Undergraduate / 'plethora of opportunities' - The Ohio State University Essay [4]

I like your essays, but like others before me suggested, i think you should research the school more and give ideas about more personal things you like about the university, rather than things we can find by just looking at their website. You seem like a great writer, so i hope this advice can help you.
daressa_howard   
Aug 8, 2010
Undergraduate / "hand-picked" for a career: honestly critique my admissions essay [3]

This is the prompt:In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service. Remember to keep within the 500-word maximum length.

Ok here's my essay:

Have you ever felt that you were "hand-picked" for a career? I mean deep in your heart and soul, you become certain that the career path you have chosen is your destiny. Well this is the love and passion that I share for Sociology and counseling.

I often ponder if my deep affection for the subjects was the result of the many adolescent years I spent only existing? Or did it come about after Dr. Burns diagnosed that that the only psychological disorder I ever suffered was a being caterpillar waiting to beautifully blossom. Either way, I was yet another woman encamped by a popular monster known as Low-Self Esteem.

Descending from an African American Heritage; we as a whole are commonly of a more voluptuous weight; we're adorned with darker shades of skin, with larger lips and even funny accents. However this is not just a dilemma gated by the African American Culture, it's one embraced by woman of all ethnic backgrounds. Women all over are being hinder, feeling inadequate because current Media and trends have socialized our population into believing that beauty should meet some sort of standard. Corrupted standards that made me afraid to perform in school plays or feel uneasy to run for student body president.

Perpetual sessions with Dr. Burns have positively changed my self-concept. I've discerned that true beauty goes beyond appearance. My beauty symbolizes: Who I am in this world, the abundant amounts of knowledge I will absorbed, and the number of people I can help.

All that I have been through as a progressing woman into today's society, I am confident that I will be a prominent asset to the University of Florida. I feel as though I have the innovation and personality to initiate a motivational group with young women. I can use my experiences to positively affect students I interact with during classroom activities or that I encounter by my involvement in extra-curriculum activities.

Thankfully, life has uncovered that some experiences will prove to be meaningless, while others will forever be embedded in your heart. At the University of Florida I am dedicated to embarking my journey to becoming pronounced Counselor helping another young woman uncover their talents, as Dr. Burns helped me.
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