Writing Feedback / Happy is difficult to define. What factors are important to achieve happiness? [3]

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Topic: Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important to achieve happiness?

People around the world are looking for something, day by day, called "happy". Although there is no official definition about happiness, being happy, in my opinion, depends on individual's conceptions, and not too difficult to find.

For most of people, happiness is an important goal in life. They try to do everything, earn as much money as they can to satisfy their unlimited demand. A kid, for example, tries his best to get good mark, or a mature person works hard to support his family. All of them try to make their lives become better, or in other worlds, to be happier.

We are searching the world to find happiness, but sometimes, it exists round us that we do not recognize. Once, I went to a charity center for disability children to celebrate a mid-summer affair party. Watching their happy lovely faces made me feel funny, and I knew that I had done a right thing despite I was very tired after a working day. From my own experience, I realize that happiness will come to a man who gives rather than smaller.

Perhaps we will find happiness from simple things, for me, there are three primary factors contributing to our happiness. First, we can do anything if we have strength. Next is money that will make our life become more comfortable. Time is the last thing we need to achieve happiness. If we have these three things, I believe we will find the way to be happy.

To sum up, happiness is not too difficult, as many people think, to achieve. The only thing that we need to remember is that we always have to look the life with the positive eyes, happiness will find us.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio. [3]

topic: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio as media for communication information. State which you consider to be the most effective.

In the modern life, there are many technology advances that they are used for communicating ,such as television, radio and books. Althought the primary usefulness of them is spreading information, actually they can affect people in many ways depending on our purpose to use them.

It is no doubt that most of our basic knowledge comes from books. Picture books, novels , academic criteria ,etc., from which we can achieve a lagre amount of information as a little kid to a mature are printed in paper. Books teach us about the surroundings with the unlimited imagination. However, in some cases, books seem to be unabblianced and out of reach for the poors and illiterates.

As regard to radio, it can be finded more interesting than books as a informative tool. Radio can surve human beings with the updated information and the enjoyable music. Moreover, it is useful to listen radio anywhere and anytime just with a headphone or mobilephone. On the other hand, there are less people listen to radio than thay do before as the result from poor sounds in the noisy place.

Personally, i believe that television is the fantastic invention in 20th century for its advantages. In these days, one can stay at home and watch what happens in the different parts of the world with the vivid image and exciting sound. In addition, we can relax after the hours in work place to enjoy wide range of channels and attractive shows on TV. Nevertheless, many recent researchs point out the negative effects of television. Kids,as the typical example, who switch on tv very soon may have the aggressive behaviors if they watch unappropriate programs, for instance, violent films or gameshow, the list goes on.

As far as i am concerned, television influences people the most beside others media. With the bomb in technology development, human can find many others tool to communicate,but television still have the strong effects for the next long time.