Scholarship / (Reduction of tuition fees) A scholarship application essay [4]

I intend to apply for a scholarship from the university that I've applied and am accepted. I need some advices and suggestions so that I can produce a nice one and hopefully my application will be approved. Here I say thank you for willing to read it and your any advices and suggestions are highly appreciated! Thanks!

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My decision to pursue my master degree at --- is made after prudent consideration regarded the course's structure and my future goal. Both my diploma and undergraduate studies in Japan have helped me to realise the very first step towards my goal and has encouraged me to further my study to a higher level. My long-term goal is to contribute towards improving the industrial technologies in the developing countries. Thus I believe it is very important for me to pursue my study and carry out research in a good environment that will provide me with the necessary tools, i.e. the knowledge, the essential skills and research experiences, in order to achieve my goal.

For your knowledge, I am currently under sponsorship from ----- for my undergraduate study. Because of this, I have little concern of my living costs in Japan as my parents cannot afford the expensive tuition fees and living costs. Apart from being able to retain my CGPA above 3.90 during my studies here, I have actively attended to lectures and conferences held at the university and participated in different extracurricular activities, for instance, the English Club, Japanese Language Speech contests, World Vision Japan, and etc.

For my one-year master course at ----, I want to further enhance my knowledge especially in the field of green chemistry and my laboratory skills. The Department of Chemistry at ---- is one of the most prestigious departments in the UK and by taking advantage of the strong collaboration with industrial sector available I believe I will be greatly benefited. As my goal is to help improving the technologies in the third-world countries, such experiences will allow me to learn of the cutting edge technologies and gain useful perspectives that I can make use of in the future. After completing the master course, my intention is to further my study to PhD if I am financially affordable.

I believe with the reduction of my tuition fees, I will be able to concentrate more on my study and the research project followed. It has always been my goal to become involved in this field, and to contribute towards bettering the lives of my fellow man, especially of the people in developing countries. Therefore, I hope that you will help and provide me with the chance to pursue this goal, which I believe is achievable with your support.

Graduate / 'Research project and industrial' - Personal Statement for MSc Energy and Environment [6]

Hello, I need some advices for my PS. What other things that I need to include in my PS to make it more attracting? This is my first time writing one. Any suggestion will help me a lot.

I remember vividly the first experiment my science teacher demonstrated to us during my primary school. She put two electrodes into a salt solution and passed an electric current. I could see gases were gradually generated at both of the electrodes and the fact that electrical energy can be produced if the reaction is reversed fascinated me and has triggered my interest in Science. After graduated from high school, I was awarded a scholarship by the Malaysian Government to further my study at a technical college in Japan. Due to my interest especially in Chemistry, I decided to take the Chemistry and Materials Science course and three years later, I completed the course with an Excellent Student Award and was successfully received as a student of the Department of Science and Engineering at the University of Tsukuba, Japan.

During my period of study at the technical college (Gunma National College of Technology), I was introduced the concept of sustainability during a class visit to Tokyo Gas, one of the leading companies in the field of energy in Japan. We were then required by the professor to investigate the impacts of the climate change and to discuss the adaptations that should be made. This assignment has provided me with opportunity to look into the many critical environmental issues as well as the major factors and as a consequence, I became very concerned about the potential risk posed if third-world countries continue to develop without the latest technologies and sufficient awareness of environmental issues.

Unlike the advanced countries, most of the developing countries are still far away from the starting line to establish green technology. The lack of awareness of environmental issues and the prohibitive cost of implementation of green technology are, in my opinion, the major hurdles. Bearing this in mind, I decided to involve in the field of sustainable development and my goal is to contribute to bettering the technologies of developing countries. I believe that a clean and sustainable technology, coupled with a close cooperation between government and industry sector can assure an economic development without harming the environment.

By applying to XXX, I am aiming to deepen my knowledge of sustainable development as well as acquiring the essential technical skills that will help me to pursue my ultimate goal. I am particularly attracted to the opportunity of undertaking a research project in collaboration with companies and organizations from a wide range of sectors that is available at XXX. I believe that taking advantage of the strong industrial connections would also help the planning of my future career. Furthermore, the diversity of people available at XXX will provide me with platform to interact with specialists from different backgrounds and would enable further understandings of issues related to sustainable development in the third-world countries.

As I successfully complete my postgraduate course, I hope to work for an international organization which involves in the field of sustainable development. I assure you that if provided the opportunity, I will prove myself a capable and dedicated student.

THANKS!!