Undergraduate / Brown Supplements- "Why Brown?" and "Academic Interests" - Critique! [4]

Hi,
Please be harshly critical with my supplements for Brown. Thank you in advance!!!!

Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? 1000 char

Brown appeals to me as a college option because of its emphasis on liberal education. As an applicant of Brown's PLME, I find that although my primary interests lay in medicine, I am not constricted to a set of requirements or a particular field. Although the program will fully prepare me for a career in medicine, it does not restrict my exploration and future curiosity of interdisciplinary subjects. Furthermore, the Brown curriculum gives me the responsibility of my education, an incentive to make mature decisions but at the same time choose courses in which I am genuinely interested. I can incorporate my interests in the cultural (Indian classical music and dance), scientific (neuroscience), and historical realms to create an individualistic and holistic education. The students are truly inspired, have a drive to succeed, and abet in each other's didactical journey. At Brown, I don't have to be a conglomeration of letters, numbers, or credits. I can be myself.

Why are you drawn to the academic fields you indicated in the Anticipated Degree and Academic Interest questions above? 1000 characters
The brain is the microchip with which humans process everything. Hearing, seeing, feeling all come from the brain, more accurately as a result of interactions between billions of neurons. My interest in neuroscience comes from an elusive need to explore the origin of what makes us uniquely human: our capacity for thought, our ability to perceive, and our capability to comprehend. Moreover, my curiousity stems from the fact that neurons, despite their miniscule size, are able to produce complex electrical reactions that enable us to function. Furthermore, the connection between music and neuroscience allows me to study two interdisciplinary subjects at ease. The connection, the link between the two would also help me in furthering my cultural music studies and widen my career pathways to incorporate music therapy in my path of medicine.

Undergraduate / "I like learning." - Why Brown? - Brown Supplement [5]

This is my Why Brown? essay. Please be harshly critical with it, and thank you in advance.
Its 1071 characters, so I do need to thin it out a little

Thanks Again!

Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? 1000 char

I like learning. In fact, I love learning. But, school? That's a different story. In my high school, I felt out of place. Although I valued the rigors of the curriculum, everyone was only learning for one purpose: to earn a better GPA and get into a better college. I believed that my education should an experience that has inculcated all my interests, and not a generic number churned out of a computer.

At Brown, I am given the freedom to grow into a better person and scholar by nurturing my interests in a broad area of subjects. I am given the responsibility of my education in which I am to find a delicate balance between maturity and exploration, delve into various interdisciplinary subjects, and incorporate my studies (or interests?) in the cultural (Indian classical music and dance), scientific, and historical realms to produce an individualistic and holistic education. The tight-knit community of students doesn't compete against each other, but abet in each other's didactical journey. At Brown, I don't have to be a number or a letter. I can be myself.