Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Playing Sports teaches us lessons about life? Yes, there are at least 3 things [7]

Topic:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.

I am going to take the TOEFL exam in a few days, and here is a essay I write for a topic above. I am a bit confused that if I understand the topic properly. I will appreciate you very much if you can help to identify my errors and give me some advice, thank you.

Time: 20min

In my personal life, I love sports, especially jogging, and I strongly agreed with the speaker's statement that playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life. I believed that there are at least three things that sports can teach people as following.

To begin with, I think the most valuable lesson that people can learn from doing sports is the spirit of sports. The spirit of sports is an wonderful experience in one's life that is not likely to be gained unless one takes part in the sports. The most vital spirit I learned from playing sports is to insist. Since I love jogging and the key factor of running longer and faster is to insist. When you are tired and feel cannot move a single step, if you insist on running, you will not only improve your muscle or running skill , but also you improve your spiritual power. The suffer that I experienced whiling doing sports teaches me an important lesson which could leading me to success, which I think the most important one of these lessons is to insist.

Secondly, doing sports also bring people inspiration. As a student in university, I have a lot of research work to do.When I am doing sports, my scientific part of my brain can get rest for a while, which helps me get inspiration and work more efficiently. Even I am intereted in my major subject and the assigments which my teacher gives me, I still like to spare some time to doing physical exerise to relax my mind, and strengthen my body in the meantime. After doing some sports and having a comfortable shower, I could feel my mind are getting sharper and clearer. And I can solve my scientific problems more easily. This is the treasure that doing sports brings me, or in another word, teaches me.

The last but not the least, the life is not only about mental, knowing oneself's body is definitely part of our lives. Through playing sports, I can know better about my body information, taking for example, how fast could I run? How long could I jump? How strong my muscle is? These knowledge could only be obtained through doing sports by oneself. Since I am always dream to travel around the world, learning about my physical ability is becoming a valuable lesson that I could learn from doing sports.