Undergraduate / wanted to enter the medical field- Vires Artes Mres. Need a conclusion and revision. [3]

- The Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

"Vires, Artes, and Mores" are all philosophical concepts which are adopted by different people and embodied into their personal characteristics. You cannot attain these traits just by living through your life and expecting to learn them on the way. You must work diligently and pursue your goals no matter what obstacles confront you. Each of these concepts I have been working to learn throughout my high school career, and I hope to embody what I now know into my time attending Florida State University.

Ever since I was a child, I have always wanted to enter the medical field. I not only chose this because of the success I could possibly obtain, but I believe that nothing feels better then saving someone's life and allowing them that extra time to live their life to the fullest. Also, when I was young I got extremely sick and had to go to the hospital. The doctors discovered that I had pneumonia which is an inflammatory condition of the lung which causes many deaths within the older and younger population. Luckily, the doctors treated me and cured my illness. I believe that this was most likely the start of my dreams to enter the medical field. I want to help save others from similar problems to that which I had at such a young age.

These strengths which I have learned throughout years of trial and error have gotten me through high school and prepared me for college. To reach the point that I am at today I had to exemplify each of these traits in various different ways. I had to push myself to succeed and pursuit the intellectual level required to complete high school and follow through with reaching my goals. I faced many challenges on the way to becoming who I am today. I dealt with sleepless nights studying, tiring days of tennis practice, and weekends of staying home working on essays instead of going out with friends. Even though at the time I didn't realize it, I know now that each of these decisions help to shape my characteristics and make me the person I am today.

I need to come up with a clever conclusion, that will sum everything up but i dont want it to sound too cheesy. Please be harsh. Thank you =)