Undergraduate / "the Hispanic community" - The World I Come From [5]

Prompt: Describe the World you come from--for example your family, community, or school-- and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

(Between 250-750 words)

Okaay, this is what i have so faar. Please help me improve this essay(: it would be greatly appricated!

People come from all over the world, each bringing something special to the mix of humanity. I come from a very common world, the world that makes up the majority in Southern California, the Hispanic community. My parents came to America as young adults, with no knowledge of the English Language or how society works. They came here with a goal, to make their lives better, to enjoy a land with freedom, and to persevere against the odds. My mom and dad pushed through the impossibilities and obstacles to make life for me and my siblings easier. I am first generation American, with Nicaraguan and Salvadorian blood running through my veins. My family has taught me that when all the odds are against you, it makes the accomplishments worth while. After countless failures and achievements, my parents were able to provide us with food, a roof above our heads, and eternal love. Their aspirations to reach for stars landed them on a cloud. They tell me, never aim for a star, but aim for world which you can conquer with hard work and perseverance. I was raised to always to my best and follow my instincts. I grew up surrounded by family, which is the antidote when the odds are against you. Because of the world I live in, my goals and aspirations are that much more important for me to achieve. I want to inspire other the way my family inspires me to do my best, through writing and literature. I want to graduate with a PhD, the way my mom is struggling to accomplish. I want show the world that I can make a difference. All it takes is a little hard work and perseverance.

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