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Oct 25, 2010
Undergraduate / "My father: my friend and advisor" - a person who had a significant influence on you [5]
compare with the original and you will recognize the corrections. maybe you should explain the words that i have put in double quotes.
Lastly, I wouldn't be here if it wasn't my father's support and unconditinal love. Instead, I would have been "a big frog in a little pond". Before I came to lekki british international High school, I used think that I was better than everyone else, but when I got to lekki British, life changed for me. My father told me: not everyone will like me; there will always be people out there waiting for your failure to come or waiting for you to fail- And in truth there were people there who did not like me, but because of the words my father said to me, I was ready to face the world and stand up for myself. However, when I almost began to think that I was the best again, my father was the one who lead me to a "larger stream". If it wasn't him, I would have been a just a big frog full of self-conceit. Thanks to him, I'm now attending this terrific high school, competing with other students.
compare with the original and you will recognize the corrections. maybe you should explain the words that i have put in double quotes.
Lastly, I wouldn't be here if it wasn't my father's support and unconditinal love. Instead, I would have been "a big frog in a little pond". Before I came to lekki british international High school, I used think that I was better than everyone else, but when I got to lekki British, life changed for me. My father told me: not everyone will like me; there will always be people out there waiting for your failure to come or waiting for you to fail- And in truth there were people there who did not like me, but because of the words my father said to me, I was ready to face the world and stand up for myself. However, when I almost began to think that I was the best again, my father was the one who lead me to a "larger stream". If it wasn't him, I would have been a just a big frog full of self-conceit. Thanks to him, I'm now attending this terrific high school, competing with other students.
