Undergraduate / Reading, bike riding, studying - Ohio State University Entrance Essay [4]

I'm not finished yet, but i'd just like to get some feedback on what i've started on! Thank you :)

Reading by Mirror Lake, bike riding through The Oval, or studying in Thompson Library. Just one look around The Ohio State University confirms why I want to become a Buckeye. The beautiful campus is exactly where I want to further my education and be able to call home.

The Fisher School of Business provides an academically challenging program for the students of Ohio State. I hope to become a part of the Fisher experience and the opportunities it has to offer. Being rated top in the nation, I know it will help me excel in management information systems.

Like I said, i'm not quite finished yet, but that's what i've started with. Thanks again to all!