The beautiful campus is exactly where I want to further my education and be able to call home.
This sentence does not answer the question raised in the sentence that precedes it. "exactly where" does not say anything. What is the real answer to the question?
All you need is to be able to envision yourself learning the subjects that you want to learn at this school, in its particular program... with the professors, some of whose names you surely know.
Know what I mean? Show that you have a vision of the future.
This is not a goal: excel in management information systems. A goal needs to be more specific.
So... get detailed about how you see your future! :-)