Undergraduate / "I want to simply help others - a government major" - Cornell CAS Essay [5]

Yes I do. It seems unnecessary. From your essay I get that you are an altruistic person. It is admirable that your intellectual interest stems from caring about others. :)

Undergraduate / "I want to simply help others - a government major" - Cornell CAS Essay [5]

Politics is an intellectual interest. I didn't know where you were going at first, until I realized that you were interested in making a difference in your country. I am not sure the first paragraph should be the first paragraph, it lead me astray initially. I also think that you might need to be more specific about Cornell's program.