Undergraduate / "to become a Physical Therapist" - admissions to university of IL- professional goals [4]

you use "i" way too much, try to combine sentences and things to reduce the usage, it is extremely repetitive. also, make sure you stay on point. 2 of the 3 paragraphs talk about the past, in the question, they want to know about your future goals. all you told the, about your possessional goals is that you want to learn about physical therapy.