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Oct 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Biology, to answer that question" - Why Georgetown? [3]

Prompt: Please relate your interest in studying at Georgetown University to your goals. How do these thoughts relate to your chosen course of study?

A red rose blossoming in the grass...
Some may see it as a gift for someone special or, to others, a nice lawn decoration. But what do I see? I see the wonder that is nature. I see billions of cellular reactions interacting as a harmonious symphony of life. From the energy-producing mitochondria in the cell to the almost gravity defying movement of water in the phloem, I see it all. I see the reasons for how and why things happen and intend to answers those questions further.

Biology, the study of life in all its forms, is to me the most intriguing of all sciences. It is the study of life from the simple organelles of a cell to the entire biosphere of Earth. Even in my grade school years I can remember being fascinated by the various intricacies within the human body down to the molecular level. And this fascination has never left me, as any of my friends will tell you. Appropriately, I intend to major in Biology through Georgetown College.

Before I had even visited Georgetown University, listened to the information sessions, and spoken with representatives, I knew that Georgetown was a spectacular school. In particular, I had heard quite a lot about the exceptional science department and the post-graduate medical school. And with a new science center to be completed during my sophomore year, the quality and extent of education that Georgetown provides only increases my desire and ability to learn about biology in an effective and accelerated environment. Georgetown University is synonymous with its extensive scientific research, a critical aspect in advancing scientific inquiry for students. In becoming a true biologist, true scientific inquiry is needed and Georgetown provides this at an exceptional level.

Studying to become a Biology major at Georgetown University helps to provide answers to scientific hypotheses from both autonomous research as well as faculty-initiated learning. A school such as Georgetown provides exactly the right conditions to learn and study the nature of the humanity on the most basic level. From this newfound knowledge, I hope to develop new understandings on the relationship between intracranial functions and the development of the human body as well as neurological and organism development. If not for the rest of the world to understand, it is for me to have the satisfaction of knowing "how" cellular interactions affect life at an almost inconceivable level. And Georgetown University, with its profound research and extensive learning experience, will not only answer that question of "how", but will teach me to answer that question on my own as a true biologist.
CDDSR   
Oct 31, 2010
Undergraduate / Interest in Medicine/Rutgers Essay [5]

I did notreally understand why the lady said she needed to pick up her children, until later that day.

At that time, I did notunderstand any of this medical jargon, I don't think any seven year old knows what Alzheimer's is.as I was only seven years old at the time.

I soon came to know that this was a Nursing home, filled with elderly people who have all sorts of physiological problems.

Of course I did not know how to help the elderly people at the time , but after a month or two constantly spending time with the elderly, their mood's started to lighten up.

As I became close working with the elderly, we began to form friendships.

I fell in love with taking care of them. And so began my passion for caring for the elderly.

One evening my parents announced that we wonreceived our green cards and were planning to move from Israel to the United States.

My interest in medicine abruptly ended until I was 13 and foundAt the age of 13, I was given the opportunity to volunteer at Coney Island Hospital.

I would unlock the ability to care for the patients on the units such as taking vital signs, making their beds, and simply just keeping them company

Due to this opportunityFrom this experience , I have developed a strong work ethic and I know that in order to be truly happy with my life, I will need a career that I love.

Also, a general writing rule is to avoid using contractions as much as possible.
CDDSR   
Oct 31, 2010
Undergraduate / College essay about gay rights (issue of importance) [2]

The sermon began when a plump middle-aged man waddled onto the stage and

I allowed the lies and the ignorance to seep over me and my companions.--> this is a pretty bold statement and while some may agree with you, others will not. so, it is better to leave anything that could be considered argumentative or debateable out of the essay because you cannot know the opinions of the AO and how it may affect their decision. (It is good though that you have an opinion you stand up for but i would stick with calling it "intolerance")

A short
description is scrawled above the membranous entrance to my memory.

John, the man conducting this lesson, (or something to that affect) ascends to the stage and grips the microphone. That is his name, like
the prophet who was born to sterile parents


You make several mentions of membranes and one of cytoplasm...is there a goal in this? i would consider using different metaphors.

In general, you essay is very interesting and makes a good argument, but keep in mind it is a topic that some have a fiery passion for.
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