ashkat
Nov 10, 2010
Undergraduate / FIT essay for Fashion Merchandising Management [7]
[quote=ashkat]Ok I'm back I went ahead and re-wrote the first paragraph of my essay & removed the 2nd and 3rd para. Please give me input. Should I add anything else? Does it sound like a good admission essay?
thankx :)
Fashion has the power to change a person both inward and outward. I love how just putting on clothes, makeup, accessories and shoes could make a person change their whole attitude. I remember the first time as a pre-teen where I had put together my own outfit without any input from my mother, I felt more confident and beautiful than ever before. I was at that time and still to this day a dedicated reader of fashion's top magazines such as Elle, Vogue, & Harper's Bazaar. I always refer to them as my fairy godmothers because even though they didn't transform a pumpkin into a carriage or magically put me in a beautiful gown and slippers like the fairy godmother did for Cinderella in the movie, they did however become my mentors, and I became their protégé. The magazines used their "magical powers" to help me create my own fashion sense and provided me with knowledge for what was in for the seasons. I'd rip out the pages of the magazines with editorials that had models modeling pieces that inspired me. I would spread them all over my bed and pick and choose the key pieces of clothes , accessories and shoes that I thought I could imitate and find in the stores cheaper. I then at that young age found my love.
Though I may not have many experiences in the fashion industry, I want to go on to FIT where I know I can be like a blank canvas and FIT can just paint and layer me with all the experiences I need. I don't live in a major city like NYC so my experiences in fashion where I'm from would be completely different from any experiences I can receive from one of the top fashion institutes, which is conveniently located in one of the top fashion capitals of the world.
I'm interested in applying to FIT because of its reputation to have the best Fashion Merchandising Management program out of all the fashion Institutes I've researched. I think this would be a great place for me to get my degree doing something I loved just doing as a child. I am someone FIT can help provide all the things their mission states that there is to offer to a student of FIT. The Fashion Institute of Technology is a place where I can only get the best industry leading experience, educational experience, growth and self development. I would be very grateful to learn from such outstanding leaders who can give me insight as how to survive and thrive in this desired field.
As a student of FIT I can offer my hard work, great diligence, creativity, my enthusiastic attitude. My ability to work well with others, being able to still work at an optimal level under great pressure. I really want to prove myself with my work there at FIT.
My goals at FIT would be to earn my AS degree in Fashion Merchandising Management and then after continue my education at FIT to go on to earn my BS degree in Cosmetic and Fragrance Marketing. My dreams are to go on and become a buyer for the cosmetic franchise Sephora or a buyer for a high end boutique. Either way I really desire to go on and do great things in fashion and I believe that with FIT behind me I can do them all.
I wish that you would please review me and see that I am a fantastic candidate for placement at your school. I am willing to work hard, persevere challenge my self and abilities. I would be beyond humbly honored to even be considered as a student there at FIT. I hope to hear from you soon.
[quote=ashkat]Ok I'm back I went ahead and re-wrote the first paragraph of my essay & removed the 2nd and 3rd para. Please give me input. Should I add anything else? Does it sound like a good admission essay?
thankx :)
Fashion has the power to change a person both inward and outward. I love how just putting on clothes, makeup, accessories and shoes could make a person change their whole attitude. I remember the first time as a pre-teen where I had put together my own outfit without any input from my mother, I felt more confident and beautiful than ever before. I was at that time and still to this day a dedicated reader of fashion's top magazines such as Elle, Vogue, & Harper's Bazaar. I always refer to them as my fairy godmothers because even though they didn't transform a pumpkin into a carriage or magically put me in a beautiful gown and slippers like the fairy godmother did for Cinderella in the movie, they did however become my mentors, and I became their protégé. The magazines used their "magical powers" to help me create my own fashion sense and provided me with knowledge for what was in for the seasons. I'd rip out the pages of the magazines with editorials that had models modeling pieces that inspired me. I would spread them all over my bed and pick and choose the key pieces of clothes , accessories and shoes that I thought I could imitate and find in the stores cheaper. I then at that young age found my love.
Though I may not have many experiences in the fashion industry, I want to go on to FIT where I know I can be like a blank canvas and FIT can just paint and layer me with all the experiences I need. I don't live in a major city like NYC so my experiences in fashion where I'm from would be completely different from any experiences I can receive from one of the top fashion institutes, which is conveniently located in one of the top fashion capitals of the world.
I'm interested in applying to FIT because of its reputation to have the best Fashion Merchandising Management program out of all the fashion Institutes I've researched. I think this would be a great place for me to get my degree doing something I loved just doing as a child. I am someone FIT can help provide all the things their mission states that there is to offer to a student of FIT. The Fashion Institute of Technology is a place where I can only get the best industry leading experience, educational experience, growth and self development. I would be very grateful to learn from such outstanding leaders who can give me insight as how to survive and thrive in this desired field.
As a student of FIT I can offer my hard work, great diligence, creativity, my enthusiastic attitude. My ability to work well with others, being able to still work at an optimal level under great pressure. I really want to prove myself with my work there at FIT.
My goals at FIT would be to earn my AS degree in Fashion Merchandising Management and then after continue my education at FIT to go on to earn my BS degree in Cosmetic and Fragrance Marketing. My dreams are to go on and become a buyer for the cosmetic franchise Sephora or a buyer for a high end boutique. Either way I really desire to go on and do great things in fashion and I believe that with FIT behind me I can do them all.
I wish that you would please review me and see that I am a fantastic candidate for placement at your school. I am willing to work hard, persevere challenge my self and abilities. I would be beyond humbly honored to even be considered as a student there at FIT. I hope to hear from you soon.