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GroovyStar   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / Disabled Daughter + Jewel + Roommate (beautiful scenery) - 3 Stanfords [3]

Please edit!!! In the meantime I'll be editing other essays.
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Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

"Confessions of a Disabled Parent's Daughter"

On the night of November 17, 2007, my mother, my brother, and I visited my father at the hospital. At the time, he had already been in the hospital for a week after suffering a heart attack and undergoing open-heart surgery. I thought that our laughter and conversation that night was a sign that my father was recovering very well.

Fast-forward to the next morning, when I awoke to the brightness of the sun and the sound of my mother's rushed movement. Just another typical morning, I thought at first. However, as my eyes became fully open, I could clearly see distress on my mother's face. When I asked her what was wrong, she responded with the words that shook me like an earthquake: "Daddy had a stroke." Spaced out and in a subdued state of disbelief, I thought: I don't understand. We just saw him last night!

From the onset of my father's illness, I have confronted emotions and issues that many teenagers have never faced. My father stayed in multiple hospitals and rehabilitation centers from November 2007 to January 2008. After coming back home for a month, he developed kidney problems which caused him to reenter the hospital until May. The grim events and prognoses during the course of those transitions, including hearing from my mother in the kitchen that my father had the heart attack and witnessing him in his hospital bed unable to speak, made me constantly worried that I might actually lose him. Even though I was rarely able to shed any tears, the prospect of a parent's death frightened me.

Along with the emotional hardships of my father's illness came social hardships. Since my mother and I were taking care of him after the times he was released from the hospital, we have not been able to work outside our home or travel as far or often as we used to. I cannot count how many social outings I had to reject because of my partial responsibility for my father's well-being. I'd be lying if I said there weren't times when I felt depressed because I couldn't see my friends or relatives on a regular basis. For the most part, though, I was determined to not let this slight lack of a social life get to me. My father's illness had affected me internally and externally.

Through all the heartache and struggles, I have not regretted one sacrifice. The way I see it, dealing with my father's illness was hands-on training in the lessons of selflessness. By worrying about him constantly in the beginning and helping care for him later, I was able to step into his shoes and feel a part of his pain. Since my father became sick, I have become much more inspired to put other people's needs before my own. And I can proudly say that I'm a better person for it.

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1. Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

Jewel, a fictional series that I have been working on since my junior year of high school, is about a diverse group of college students who can transform into human versions of gemstones in order to fight against evil. When I first started the series, I didn't know how much of a captivating experience creating my characters' collective identities would be.

Since Jewel was obviously going to include heavy references to gemology, the first part of my research revolved around the subject. Over time, the attacks and personalities of the "human gems" became entirely based on what I learned on the Internet about real-life gemstones and the powers and chakras they are associated with. After feeling that my characters' personalities were still lacking depth, I decided to begin the second part of my research. Plenty of websites devoted to personality psychology, particularly those related to the Enneagram and the sixteen Myers-Briggs types, instantly grabbed my attention. My immersion in these websites led me to assign each of my characters four letters and a number!

The effects of my newfound knowledge of gemology and personality psychology have extended beyond Jewel. Now I find myself asking people I know, including myself, what their personality types are and what their favorite gemstone is! My work on Jewel has instilled in me not only a love for the personality, but also an understanding of the fact that each one of us has unique qualities that make us all jewels.

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2. Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate-and us-know you better.

Dear Roommate,

I constantly see my life as an evolving television series with a theme song, unique characters, interesting plots, and different scenery. I even have a title for my TV show: Neck of The Woods. Quite fitting for a girl whose last name is Woods, don't you think? Now I know you are probably chuckling while reading this. I don't mind. I've chuckled at this thought as well, considering the fact that I hardly watch TV. Nevertheless, I have to tell you a couple of things about my TV show as a way to tell you a couple of things about myself.

Let's start with the main character: me! I am probably one of the most complex people you will meet in terms of personality. From being an "extraverted introvert" to being simultaneously silly and serious, I am one random individual!

Tune in to my show, and you'd hear background music in almost every scene. When I'm remembering or living out an experience, a favorite song will always play in my head. Lionel Ritchie's "Love Will Conquer All" reminds me of the times I've rode through California's San Fernando Valley at night, and Manhattan Transfer's "Twilight Zone" is playing as I write this letter. My music defines my life.

Roommate, I already know that you will be one of many unique characters in my series. With that said, I cannot wait to meet you in the beautiful scenery that is Stanford!

Sincerely,
Your Amazing Roommate

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3. Tell us what makes Stanford a good place for you.

From the moment I laid my eyes on the lush campus while arriving for my first college tour, I knew that Stanford was my dream school. This belief only became stronger when my campus visit was over.

For me, looking at Stanford is like looking at a reflection in the mirror. The world-class academics reflect my love for expanding my knowledge, the student body reflects my love for diversity, the location reflects my love for California and the fact that Silicon Valley has many resources that can contribute to a student's learning - I could go on and on about the general reasons why Stanford is the right place for me. What stood out to me the most about Stanford, however, was the Haas Center for Public Service. Stanford is the only college I have heard of that has a facility entirely devoted to community service. As a person who values the betterment of others and who finds joy in doing service work, I find that very unique. Stanford's community service opportunities are yet another reflection in the mirror - a reflection of my love for giving back.

The kind of education I seek is not necessarily one that is restricted to the classroom. Rather, I want an education that opens my mind and pushes me to grow as a person. At Stanford, I know I will find this and much more...
GroovyStar   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "helping alienated people" - CommonApp - HARVARD , PRINCETON [4]

Perhaps you've seen striking pictures that may be depicted as outdated patrons of individual's public relations during Christmas seasons: prominent politicians fund-raising on the streets, popular celebrities distributing free meals to homeless vagrants, and entrepreneurs of conglomerate firms playing with children at orphanages. Whenever I saw such finger-shriveling pictures, I thought those socially renowned people should have been ashamed of themselves for taking photographs intended to command esteem from the public. Is it necessary to make the best use of 'voluntary' contribution - a good conduct which must be motivated by one's pure rectitude - to make an ostentatious and pretentious public display of one's moral sense ? A good deed shines more when it is concealed.

However, my belief has gradually been transformed through the vivid experiences from which I have explored the 'real' world. Of course, the most idealistic donation is needless to say, voluntary, anonymous, and continuous action. Yet only a small number of people's good works cannot amend a world where a child under the age of 10 perishes from famine every five seconds. In other words, volunteering should be the endowed responsibility of all the humans, not an occasional or optional work. The more prevalent the above-mentioned pictures are, the more helpful they will be in informing the majority of people the important obligation of contribution.

For the last two years, I was an active member of KOICA, an international development NGO committed to promoting sustainable development through assisting the poor in developing nations and empowering civil society. I had an opportunity to periodically travel to Africa and Southeast Asia, obtaining the unstinted financial support and practical knowledge from local secretaries staying in each country. Therefore, other members and I could learn indigenous cultures properly and work more efficiently. While enjoying traditional music and jumping dance, I helped construct and cover the Maasai houses with ash, mud, and cattle dung for waterproofing in Kenya; filled with admiration for several hours by Angkor Wat, I made a new wooden boat for Sokkon, a 14-year-old girl whose family has no house on the ground but two boats (houseboat and workboat), in Cambodia; realizing that there truly is no boundary between the sky and the ocean with eyes for the first time, I worked to renovate the interior and exterior of old school buildings and built street lights to provide security to the middle school students of a village in East Timor; I assembled goalposts in the park and gifted jerseys to the children who were eager to play soccer in Vietnam and Sri Lanka. To be a long-awaited rain to the people who had been living in the absolutely barren wasteland was complete happiness.

Although abroad experiences were already priceless, they came to me as even more significant meanings. After high school graduation, I had to give up college admission due to the unexpectedly critical family situation caused by financial difficulties. Since then, I rather deplored my ill-fated life with all my heart before I started volunteering. Meanwhile, I observed a woman who had had nothing for long but now had just one thing: clean water. She had been drinking, brushing, and cooking with stagnant ashy-colored water on which dead flies and animal feces were floating. The image would be more shocking if you actually saw it. Nonetheless, when limpid well water became available through the aid of our drilling machine, she looked too content - as if she had got everything in her hands.My grumbling must have been dumbfounded because I had everything she was longing and recently lost one, which was a quite trivial privilege. Yet, in the woman's perspective, I got daunted as if having lost all. Then, I found that I was unconscious of a huge happiness all the while. In addition, it stimulated my prolonged inherent desire to extend my hampered study at college.

Volunteering is rent for the space we occupy throughout our lives. Since we fortunately and vicariously have been using relatively ideal environments to where some other people unwillingly have to live, we need to share both convenience and discomfort with them by offering and experiencing, respectively. There are people who volunteer to show others - good. Some people volunteer under an obligation conveyed from schools or workplaces - better. Many people participate in volunteering because they want to - the superlative.That is because Helping alienated people spending time, emptying pocket, and making efforts is an action to brighten the world no matter what.

How and when could I repay this 'expensive' rent entirely? Are you paying it little by little, too?
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Overall I really like your essay! The organization is solid and the theme is consistent throughout. Great job!
GroovyStar   
Nov 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "China, the country to study in" - Studying Abroad Honors Program Essay [3]

In addition to using my prior observations of parts of the Chinese culture in order to help the people living in more rural areas of China, I hope to gain further knowledge of the business aspects within the larger cities in China. The rapidly paced manufacturing society and its diverse menu selection intrigue me.

The farmers who reside in especially remote areas of the country suffer greatly from droughts that frequently plague those areas.
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Overall, I love how I really learned more about China just by reading your essay. Good job and good luck! =)
GroovyStar   
Nov 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "Only Personal Business" - talent, experience, UC Prompt #2 [3]

Prompt #2: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

In November of 2008, I was persuaded by a student to join an organization that he was the president of. I'd be lying if I said that I wasn't reluctant at first to join. At that time, my mindset was: I already have a school schedule with one-third Honors, and I'm in Speech & Debate, and now a business club? Do I really need more of an academic workload...? Nevertheless, I joined. And now, looking back, I could not have asked for a better high school experience.

Although I am not considering a career in the business field anymore, I have been shaped in many ways by being a part of Future Business Leaders of America. For instance, my professional skills (communication, problem-solving, decision-making, etc.) have gotten better. The biggest impact that FBLA membership has had on me, however, cannot be explained in only one sentence.

On a few occasions last year, the president spoke to me about the role I indirectly played in his conversations with members from other schools. "People would ask me what school I'm from," he said. "And I'd say I'm from Gilbert High School. And they would say, 'Oh, Alexia goes there!' Everybody knows you, Alexia!"

I mention this not as a means to boast, but as a means to reflect on a personal change that I've gradually undergone since becoming an FBL (Future Business Leader).

The truth is, all of the traits that I suspect have made me so well-known are natural to me NOW.
Make no mistake. The cheering? The happy screaming? The excessive socialization? The innocent fearlessness of telling guys that they are good-looking? You would not have seen me do any of those a couple of years ago. Not in FBLA, or probably in any other club or event for that matter.

Because of FBLA, its atmosphere, and the people in that atmosphere, I am a much more outgoing and extroverted person. All these impacts that FBLA has had on me are the sole reasons why I disagree when someone dismisses FBLA as just another business club. Because, in my opinion, FBLA is about more than just business. It's about life.
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