Benn_Myers
Dec 26, 2010
Undergraduate / Bugs Bunny - different from other popular characters (Common App Essay) [9]
This essay in interesting, its a great idea and its fairly well executed. My main bit of feedback would be that you need to ground your essay more.
The goal of a good essay (at least this sort of essay) is to propose interesting ideas and provide relevant examples (grounding the essay). You provide examples of Bugs Bunny but none of YOURSELF. I would add a part of your essay where you discuss a specific example of when Bugs Bunny example has influenced your actions. This will make your essay much, much stronger. College essays are about you, and by tying back and grounding the essay in your own experiences the reader will become much more involved and your abstract paper will become directly relevant.
I rarely stress advice this much but I'm positive that your essay will be much better if you add this example.
Best of luck!
This essay in interesting, its a great idea and its fairly well executed. My main bit of feedback would be that you need to ground your essay more.
The goal of a good essay (at least this sort of essay) is to propose interesting ideas and provide relevant examples (grounding the essay). You provide examples of Bugs Bunny but none of YOURSELF. I would add a part of your essay where you discuss a specific example of when Bugs Bunny example has influenced your actions. This will make your essay much, much stronger. College essays are about you, and by tying back and grounding the essay in your own experiences the reader will become much more involved and your abstract paper will become directly relevant.
I rarely stress advice this much but I'm positive that your essay will be much better if you add this example.
Best of luck!