pareshh
Nov 19, 2010
Graduate / Social activity club, Best Design, Mechanical Engineer - ISB application [5]
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions. I have changed my essay as below, but still fighting for a better start. Please suggest me some improvements. Thanks once again.
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I believe that my achievements till now are the outcomes of my determination, passion, flexibility and hard work.
Three years since joining, I got promoted twice with the best yearly performance rating as 'Significantly Above Peer Group', which is rare in Accenture. Besides I got selected as an integrator to lead a team of employees from multiple vendors at the British Telecom Software Unit in TechMahindra. However, the opportunity that distinguished me from my peer group has been to lead two teams simultaneously in different projects (one involving latest technology with critical timelines and other being in User Acceptance Testing phase) at "Programmer level" for which my Project Manager rewarded me with 'Excellence Award'.
Winning 'Most Innovative Design Award' in Robotics competition and getting nominated as a finalist for 'Forbes Marshall's Best Project Award' are additional academic accomplishments during my graduation as a Mechanical Engineer from Pune University with the First Class.
Further, as a member of Social Activity Club in my engineering college, I have tutored economically backward students, organized Blood Donation Camps etc. In August-2005, a three day camp was organized in flood hit villages of Pen (Thane District) where I guided a team of five persons for helping people in the assigned village. This entire episode helped me to improve my management skills in the college period itself.
The knowledge I gained from my career and personal experiences will help me contribute to the class discussions and student clubs.
Being an enthusiastic person with high aspirations; my urges to learn new things, hard work and learning from diverse experiences have enhanced my decision making and leadership skills to a new level; and further they will, along with my learning from highly qualified faculty and diverse peers at ISB, surely make me an important asset of ISB.
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions. I have changed my essay as below, but still fighting for a better start. Please suggest me some improvements. Thanks once again.
Essay-->
I believe that my achievements till now are the outcomes of my determination, passion, flexibility and hard work.
Three years since joining, I got promoted twice with the best yearly performance rating as 'Significantly Above Peer Group', which is rare in Accenture. Besides I got selected as an integrator to lead a team of employees from multiple vendors at the British Telecom Software Unit in TechMahindra. However, the opportunity that distinguished me from my peer group has been to lead two teams simultaneously in different projects (one involving latest technology with critical timelines and other being in User Acceptance Testing phase) at "Programmer level" for which my Project Manager rewarded me with 'Excellence Award'.
Winning 'Most Innovative Design Award' in Robotics competition and getting nominated as a finalist for 'Forbes Marshall's Best Project Award' are additional academic accomplishments during my graduation as a Mechanical Engineer from Pune University with the First Class.
Further, as a member of Social Activity Club in my engineering college, I have tutored economically backward students, organized Blood Donation Camps etc. In August-2005, a three day camp was organized in flood hit villages of Pen (Thane District) where I guided a team of five persons for helping people in the assigned village. This entire episode helped me to improve my management skills in the college period itself.
The knowledge I gained from my career and personal experiences will help me contribute to the class discussions and student clubs.
Being an enthusiastic person with high aspirations; my urges to learn new things, hard work and learning from diverse experiences have enhanced my decision making and leadership skills to a new level; and further they will, along with my learning from highly qualified faculty and diverse peers at ISB, surely make me an important asset of ISB.
