Undergraduate / "a health care management degree" - why i want to attend Uconn essay [6]

how about this one:

Out of all the colleges in Connecticut, I knew my choice was the University of Connecticut. While searching for schools that would fit my criteria; the school that was close to my family, one that provides a health care management degree, and a college experience that a college student would want. The University of Connecticut happened to be the one. Connecticut is where i was born and raised, its my home, and so is Uconn. Besides the University of Connecticut, another school offered the same major, but I knew my heart was set on Uconn because of their beautiful campus and their prestigious business school.

The University of Connecticut offers everything i could ask for in a school. With more than 100 majors to choose from, an on-campus library and gym, studying abroad, and a number of clubs, this is a college to go to. I know college is about hard work and studying but its also about having fun while your there. At a stellar university, I would receive an outstanding education at the University of Connecticut and fulfill my dreams to become a successful business woman.