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"a household name in my family" -Why are you interested in The Ohio State University? [5]
I am about to apply to Ohio State and thought I could get some suggestions on any improvements. The question is in the subject.
I want to add more in the closing paragraph but not sure how to summarize it that isn't too repetitive.
All criticism is appreciated. Thanks.
"The Ohio State University has been a household name in my family since before I was born seeing as my dad was born in Ohio. Growing up in Virginia, our trips to OSU football games became something I looked forward to each fall. Since I was young, I loved to build things and dreamed of being an architect. Naturally, The Ohio State University, with its prestigious architecture school, became an obvious choice.
I have always known that architecture is the career I want to pursue and Ohio State's School of Architecture provides exactly what I need to make that a reality. Working in the studio and designing projects will give me the experience I will need in a professional field. Having travelled to Singapore this past summer, I learned how much I enjoy international travel. Being able to study abroad through Ohio State will not only expose me to new cultures, but allow me to discover different architecture styles and their history.
I am interested in The Ohio State University because its traditions and school pride motivate me to become a part of the experience."