Posts by kungpo91

kungpo91

Jan 19, 2011

Undergraduate / A Summer Research Program. A great start for future medical school [3]

Thank you so much and yes, I did tons of activities, but the thing is that the limit is 500 words and I'm at 550!!!!!

kungpo91

Jan 18, 2011

Undergraduate / A Summer Research Program. A great start for future medical school [3]

Please help edit, grammars, spelling, wordings etc because it is due soon. I would like to thank in advance =)!!!!!!!!!!!

You are required to write a personal essay (approximately 500 words) that explains your career plans and reasons for applying to this program. Indicate the areas of your interest and describe any research experience, courses or laboratory work, which have stimulated your interest in research. Indicate what graduate courses and/or laboratory work have best prepared you for this program.

"The obstacles in life are set out to test a person's drives, what motivates them to succeed is their dedication and their passion," I believe. This motto has always been and will always influence my academic interests as I hone my skills and knowledge through series of challenges. As a prospective Fine Art major, it has always been a prominent goal of mine to pursue a career in the medical field. As a child, I was always sick, it could be said that the hospital was my second home. Soon I'd become drawn to the atmosphere and developed an interest for the community. Now, to be able to balance my love of Fine Art and my goal in Pre-Med is truly rewarding, however, I feel that I am still lacking the experience and the necessity needed to build a strong foundation for my pursuit in the medical field. Thus a Summer Internship Program at Johns Hopkins School of Medicine is a chance that will not only enrich me academically, but will also further improve my people skills and broaden my experience in the field of research.

During my undergraduate study, I was an excessively active student. I found my Organic Chemistry and Biology courses a good opportunity to gain a deeper insight into the field itself. Lab was especially gratifying, to be able to apply theoretical knowledge in series of experiments as I synthesize organic compounds using a variety of techniques. Some common methods includes simple and fractional distillations, crystallization, filtration and extraction. My tendency to always uphold challenges led me to solve new complicated problems as I always participate with in class problem solving and as a volunteered tutor. These experiences in turn improved my leadership, responsibility, creativity and team work skills that will prepare me for the summer research.

I wish to participate in this summer program in hope that the various experiments that will emerge from the course of this program will present me with an opportunity to further strengthen my knowledge, skills and understanding of experimental procedures. Participating in this program will give me the opportunity to put my knowledge into practice and an insight as to what I need to improve upon. Furthermore, the data analysis and presentations involved in this program gives me the chance to learn and have a thorough understanding of scientific writing and increase my communication skills. Lastly, to be able to work with experienced mentors will not only give me the chance to access from their pool of knowledge but to also expose myself to mature and graduate-level capabilities. This summer program serves as an excellent opportunity for me to meet and build a network of prospective colleagues that will last a lifetime

As I mentioned earlier; The obstacles in life are set out to test a person's drives, what motivates them to succeed is their dedication and their passion. Thus I feel the Summer Internship Program at Johns Hopkins School of Medicine will not only help me grow as an individual but expand my horizon as a whole. With the skills, knowledge, and experience upon the completion of my education, I intend to make a lasting positive impact on the globe.

I feel like the conclusion is a bit weak and it doesn't ties in with the intro and body...
Second paragraph is my research experience but I feel that it's too vague and not informative. I never had any research experience outside of school so this is the best I can come up with.

I feel like I am a bit repetitive in my intro and third paragraphs.
From the quote I replaced sheer will with passion, either way both of them don't make sense and I don't wanna be cliche.

kungpo91

Jan 18, 2011

Writing Feedback / People care too much about their appearance than before. Do you agree? [6]

You are right on target! But I feel like you are missing some concepts like fear of rejection, low self-esteem, and unable to recognize one's capabilities. Let me clarify that, in high school the most popular kids were either hot jocks or a typical skinny tall blonde, so what about those nerds who are only good at configuring their calculators? Fashion is perhaps the only way for them to stand out, to help them fit in/accepted by society. Why? because society is very judgmental. But you know what, people are judgmental because they are just doing it to hide their own insecurities. In the end it's nothing but a chain reaction, one that triggers the next and so forth. It's all evolution, and it is evolution that defines who we are, it is a natural process in which one can adapt to their environment. Sorry if I'm confusing you =D

kungpo91

Jan 17, 2011

Writing Feedback / Personal thoughts about meaning of living [2]

~~Well~~ I have been thinking about how life it occasionally is for nearly two years, duringirrevelant ~~different~~ times; while ~~I was~~ talking to my friends, brushing my th eeth, orand when lying in bed in the middle of the night wishing for ~~doing~~ something else. Different questions ~~that are~~ contained in one spec ific thing ~~at the bottom line~~that comes into my mind. I'm not going to mention questions like why we came into this world or what is our purposein life isb ecause it is not something that could be based on ideological beliefs. What I'm going to write about is what are we going to do? I am now changing the subject and will continue with Ia biography of my life. Currently,I am roughly 20. So what is my assumed life expectancy? 60 perhaps?. It might not be so due to my unhealty eating habits and lifestyle~~so I'll say 40 years~~ . So what have I been doing for the past 20 years? I've done a little bit more than casual things, things that are required to accomplish and achieve to get a good life. Thank God, I have been able to do some good things. But here I am ~~and~~ thinking of meaningful things to do/achieve/work for.

As far as I can see, there are two ways. First one, you do what is required. Working and studying hard, developing yourself for job, social life, and belief. Basically doing things to get ~~more~~ social and financial needs. But, If you can't get in the list of bests, no matter what or how you did, what your best is being a successful regular person. Okay, it's sounds good. You have a nice wife and kids, friends, you're getting enough money to maintain good life, you can do/get more than many people outside. Briefly, you came in to this world, achieved some life long goals , the n died . ~~That's all.~~ Being a regular part of a regular and boring life system. If you think detailed and with a aspect of high perspective, you feel that you're just another unvaluable piece of life routine.

You came to world, you struggled for some things always with passions, desires, some stresses. But If you think it high perspectively neither world give a shit about you nor others doesn't really care about you or what you're living. You're only living for yourself. Because Your life is your life. It's meaningful for you and can not be meaningful for others in real meaning. Because you're the one who have your perspective, not anyone else.

You're just living for yourself and what you're working for is only you, but, considering your placement in the world's routine, you're just a thing, a thing that doesn't really mean to anyone except you. People like a chicken in the burger king meat factory that is eating for living and doesn't have a clue about what's going on. But, is it necessary to have an awareness of going ons ?

Anyway, let me ask a question, what's the point of around ? I mean, what are we doing ?
Is point necessary? Couldn't life is a thing without purpose ? Or are we too self-cared and therefore need a point to live- we can't be random because we're important so we need a purpose- is that it ?

Probably those questions can not be answered.
Second way is could be this one: working for living and the sametime, being part of a something bigger than you and more meaningful. You can do that to wipe off some pointlessness. Probably it's a way of how religions affect people in terms of belief that offering an endless purpose and goal to believers. For instance, I'm going to make more and more money and spend it for people and organisations that I like. Think about it, I'm working for 17 hours a day with 5 hours sleeping. Trying to work more, think more, achieve more, more and more.. for what ? ofcourse a purpose that can not be considered in the world standarts, because nothing worth it. If your main goal is more money, you can steal it in a legal way, no need to working like that.. The goal must be big to work for it. Otherwise what's the point of working and relatively living?

Personally, I think its an opinion of perspective. I'm not trying to advertise or force my beliefs on anyone but as a follower of buddhism, I was taught that life is full of sufferings and until you are fully enlightened you won't be free of that disillusionment. To be enlightened is to follow the 8 folds path and do good deed is one of the path. But I see your point =)