Undergraduate / "Music relaxes me" - MIT pleasure essay [5]

I also wrote about music, but guitar. U seem quite similar to me.
I faced the same problem. I know how difficult it is to wrote in 100 words.

I think your essay is fine, but not very special because after read your essay I feel that u like playing keyboard but not very passionate in it. But I don't really know how to change it.

Maybe you can talk about how your soul connects to the musics you play? OR Which song you play when U sad, happy ...? How your emotion change after play a song?

I mean you should talk more specific about your feeling.

That's my idea. Hope it's useful!
Good luck to you!

Undergraduate / "4.5 out of 10" - MIT: something important that didn't go according to plan [8]

oh really?
Thank you supervisor so much!
I did not realize that. That is my second language so I just expressed the idea , I did not feel that tone. I will change it.

Undergraduate / "4.5 out of 10" - MIT: something important that didn't go according to plan [8]

I rewrote the essay here, could you please check it for me? Thanks a lot.

In 7th and 8th grade I focused on studying Math because that was my brother's strength. However, I realized that if I continued to study math I could not be very successful since there was a Math prodigy in my class. I confessed that I could not defeat him; therefore I decided to find my own realm at grade 9 which was Physics.

My yearning to be the best was satisfied as I always got the highest marks in every Physics examinations. I was confident in my ability; I believed that I could get the 1st-prize at the Physics competition of Hai Duong city. At the competition, I noticed that a question was illogical since "kilometer" was mistakenly typed as "meter". I corrected the blunder in the question and finished the test perfectly. However, since the examiners only accepted the answer for the original question, I lose my mark and could not get the highest prize.

Very disappointed, I spent the whole week rethinking my path. I started to wonder my first motivation for studying Physics. In retrospect, I realized how much I loved doing my experiments, how delighted I was when I discovered the chromatic dispersion in a rainbow and how excitedly I explained it to my friends. At that time I knew that the more I studied Physics the more I loved it. The accidence hurt my pride of being the best but it helped me to understand the true incentive of study which is passion, not fame.

Undergraduate / "4.5 out of 10" - MIT: something important that didn't go according to plan [8]

Thanks for comment!
I think I wrote it quite vaguely so that you guys were confused about my idea.
So I will tell you about my story so that you can understand my situation.

----- first: I studied Math but I realized I could not be very successful ==> I studied Physics
----- when I studied Physics I was always the best in my school. All my teachers , my friends believed I could get the 1st-prize in the Physics competition of my city.

----- At the competition I did it well but there were 2 things wrong:
1st: In the question "Kilometer" was mistakenly typed wrong as "meter" =======> I knew it so I corrected and solved the question as Km.(it was easy to recognize the mistake and many students did as I did). (if you solve the question as meter the result would be illogical). However, finally the examiner accepted this illogical answer.

But this was not the reason that I got low mark. because all other questions I did perfectly.
2nd:This competition was not truthful, because some people changed the result. (it is a shame but it happened in my city). They were penalized but the result of the competition was not corrected. (It would be very complex if I talk more about this).

But in short: I got low mark not because of my poor performance.
----- I was disappointed. Finally I realized my first motivation for studying physics (study for being the best) was wrong.
====> I realized actually I like Physics and my true motivation should be passion.

After read your comments I think I must rearrange my essay. This topic is quite difficult for me to write. And maybe I should not talk about the 2nd reason in my essay in order to make it short and not make readers confused.

Thank you very much for comment!