Undergraduate / "the gothic red architectures there" - my short essay to Brown! [5]

Hello, can anyone give me some corrections and comment to my short essay for Brown Supplement?
Thanks.
Topic: Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply?

When I caught sight of the pictures of Brown University, I was deeply impressed by the gothic red architectures there. Meanwhile, "holy" and "freedom" were the two words suddenly emerging in my mind. The school motto,"In Deo Speramus", together with...

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Physics has greatly improved the development of human civilization since the era of Aristotle, which helps us to unveil the enigma of this planet and launches us into a highly technological society. From the discovery of Galileo and Newton, to Maxwell equations and Einstein's theory of relativity, Physics brings us excitement on the mystery of universe and satisfaction on producing more power for a growing population while reducing greenhouse emissions and a dependence on oil. It is a subject which is a perfect combination of abstraction and visualization. By learning it, I can gain deep understanding of the nature and develop a working style in pursuit of accuracy and prudence. What's more, I will master theoretical, experimental, and especially conceptual skills that are indispensible in both subsequent learning and future life. Therefore, I would like to pursue my academic interest of physics in Brown University and make contributions to science as well as the human-beings.