Undergraduate / Cornell College(not University!) Supplement (IA) two short answers [16]

thx ukkuma! (私も最近知ったってばー笑 なんかでも今まで英語だったから不思議な感じ＾＾）　

omg, you're right. That sentence (mine) is wired, I just realized to be told by you, it doesn't make a sense! thanks for telling me that^^

yeah, Anonymoussenior's sentence is great, I wish I could use that but I have limited space...
I tried that, and it's 260 characters. Maybe I should cut some other parts?

The OCAAT system grabbed my heart. With its unique and flexible course options, I can expand my academic interest and broaden my horizons with study abroad programs. It will enable me to devote myself to education study, while still pursuing my love for music. (260)

yup, it means "Education" major,,,, what do you think how I can change the word in better way??

Do you think I shouldn't write about OCAAT in answer #2 ??
I'm struggling to make #2 answer better but I really couldn't find any other special programs Cornell offers... Other than OCAAT, I just like its small size(actually small, 1200 students) beautiful campus, student-faculty ratio (11:1), and high rate of students living in dorms. But they are too general, aren't they? Hmm....

Undergraduate / Cornell College(not University!) Supplement (IA) two short answers [16]

Thank you very much pendulum, Jerber, and EF_Susan !!!! I was happy to receive great advices!!
So this is the prompt #2, I have no idea whether it is ok or not... I wonder whether it answers well to the prompt. Any more comments and suggestions are welcome!!!!!!!!

(2) What will likely be the primary factors determining your college choice?

Small student body, high level classes, and scholarship opportunities; These factors allow me to study hard at academically enriched environment at low cost, and have discussion enthusiastically with great students and professors everyday. (248 characters)

thank you so much!! :) :)

Undergraduate / "size, location, reputation, and the weather and the inside" Emory a college for you? [4]

"You do not have to study language for a chance to travel other parts of the country, you can study anything. Emory allows you to.."

You use the word "you" as a Subject, I guess you may want to avoid that in this situation. The readers are Admission Officers, right? It sounds like you are telling them what actually Emory is, not what you think why Emory is a college for you.

I think you can say like this, "Emory allows me to~~~" or "Its xxx programs enable me to ~~~" that way, they (AO) can imagine more vividly how you think and what kind of person you are.

The content is great, I think. You just need to change the way you express the ideas. Though these are all my personal opinions.
Hope this helps :)
Good luck for both of us!!!

Undergraduate / Cornell College(not University!) Supplement (IA) two short answers [16]

ukkuma, omg you saved my life again, I cannot thank you enough...!!!

yeah, I thought the same as you did, Jerber is right.
So I stopped trying to fit myself too much, I wrote why I choose Cornell directly and honestly.
I was encouraged by your advice Jerber, thanks!!! :) I really hope we can meet at the campus!

I now finished my whole application process, thanks to everyone's kind help!!!!!!

Good luck for all of us, and I'll continue to help others if there's something I can do :)
Thank you so much!!!! (^v^/"

Undergraduate / Cornell College(not University!) Supplement (IA) two short answers [16]

thanks imnotdreaming, I appreciate your comment but I've submitted already! sorry!!
thank you anyway ^^