Undergraduate / History + United world + Greg Mortenson - NYU supplement [7]

Please help me with grammar and essay overall.

Please tell us what led you to select both your anticipated academic area(s) of study and the NYU school / college / program or the Abu Dhabi campus. What interests you most about your intended discipline? Mention any extracurricular or non-school-related activities or experiences that demonstrate your interest.

History was always fascinating me.Later I realized that the main part of it is politics. I started to watch news,got into political science program in local university,applied for exchange program and successfully finished it.Politics makes the world move and I want to be mart of that movement.My dream is to be an ambassador of my country,and NYUAD will be the 1st step in it. While building cross-cultural relationships with students,I'll build skills of diplomat that'll help me in the future.

NYU is 'In and of the City' and 'In and of the World.' What does the concept of a global network university mean to you? How do you think studying in New York City, Abu Dhabi, or one of NYU's global sites would change you as a person and equip you to build cross-cultural relationships at NYU and beyond?

NYU shows that the world's united - despite of conflicts, we're still one nation on the globe. In every global site of NYU local culture mixes with NYC atmosphere which makes education unique. The idea of international education always fascinated me. Being among the most outstanding students will be a great challenge and motivation. It'll help me to become a successful diplomat, because difficulties will make me stronger and help to move forward.

If you had the opportunity to bring any person -- past or present, fictional or nonfictional -- to a place that is special to you (your hometown or country, a favorite location, etc), who would you bring and why? Tell us what you would share with that person.

I would bring Greg Mortenson, who provides peace in Middle-East by building schools, to my hometown, Kazan. His work's a perfect example how one man can change someone's life. I'd like talk to him about his understanding of the world and people that influenced him. I'd ask him how he didn't give up when no one supported him. I'd show him how people of different traditions and religions live peacefully in Kazan; I'd share my culture with him while drinking tea and sitting in a mosque in Kremlin.

Undergraduate / Winter Games & Sport activities - extracurricular activities or work experiences [3]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).

1) I always had something to complain about - how I look, what people think of me, how tired from school I am and more, but volunteering at Special Olympics Michigan State Winter Games has completely changed my life priorities. For several days I was surrounded by people that don't have one of the main things in their life - health. Those sportsmen ended up being the most joyful, optimistic and kind people that I've ever met in my life. During that time I was so ashamed about my own thoughts and complaints. Now, when I look back to Special Olympics Games, I understand that it not only helped me to finish my exchange year successfully, but also showed me the importance of community serves. Once you start to volunteer, you'll understand that it is life changing experience.

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2) I'm a sports fan, but sports have never been something that I enjoyed to do. Of course, I've never think that one day I'll be in a school cross-country team. Before starting practicing with a team I didn't realize that running can be not only sport, but an activity where you need to plan everything and think critically. Also, I figured out that the main point in sport is team spirit and only then the result. Those two months have been the hardest in my life and everyone thought that I'm not going to finish the season. Completing cross-country season and competing at regionals was one of the biggest accomplishments in my life, even if I was one of the slowest runners in the team. Cross-country taught me how to be patient, reliable and organized, and showed me the importance of team spirit.

I really need help with choosing one of them and with grammar as well. Thank you!