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Posts by ajayy
Joined: Dec 25, 2010
Last Post: Dec 31, 2010
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ajayy   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Cross-stitch embroidery" project, experience, class - Brown Supplement [5]

I have absolutely no criticism to your essay. It's a really good one. However, if there is no word limit (or if you haven't exceeded it yet), I believe that you should elaborate on the influence of this experience since you stated a lot already on the experience itself. Basically, I agree with the two above me. Good luck! [=
ajayy   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / fact versus fiction - Stanford. [3]

- If it's alright, I'd love to hear your opinions and criticisms on this. I'll also post back in your own threads if you do. [=

Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

"Not everything can be explained by science alone."
"This can. Stop fantasizing about the possibility of a mythical reason."
"What if there is?"
I've always believed in the supernatural, because I find fascination in thinking that there exist some aspects in life that are beyond our ordinary understanding. That explains why anyone would have understood my longing to visit the Bermuda Triangle, and uncover the secrets lying behind it. As soon as my ears caught the debate revolving around the hidden truth of the Devil Triangle's nature, my stomach doubled with the force of fifty butterflies as my curiosity was aroused. I gained the need to become a part of this phenomenon, and I hoped that life would eventually lead me to this unusual region.

My brain kept producing new theories and assumptions, and my body longed for an excursion to that destination. I aspired for more information, and spent countless hours surfing the internet in search for websites that attempted to explain this rare occurrence; however, my thirst for knowledge could not be satisfied by mere web pages. I tried seeking life stories from people who went through this experience and managed to return, but how could I trust words that might portray lies? All I knew was that I needed to visit that place, and explore it with my own eyes. I find it rather thrilling that danger presumably surrounds this place, and it attracts me only more to this unique wonder. After hearing about the Bermuda Triangle, my brain wasn't able to be satisfied with simple explanations, and kept craving more of everything, including the disappearance of the Mary Celeste and the legend of Atlantis.
ajayy   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "You are born to be a roommate of a weirdo" - Stanford Roommate [6]

I like you already! This is too amusing, but I think you can improve it a little better.

At first, you may find yourself sharing a room with a "freak" and question faith as to why it led you to this ordeal , but later you'll find yourself sharing a room with a person you can call a best friend .

These are just my eccentric self and my excitement to meet you.

I think I wrote too much now.

If I annoy you in anyway, whether it's my talking or my abnormal habits, don't be afraid to tell me.

The least I want is an upset roommate. (I think you should change this sentence somehow, cause it doesn't sound right?)

All in all, great writing, and good luck!
ajayy   
Dec 27, 2010
Undergraduate / the word "stereotype" doesn't lie within me -note to your future roommate - Stanford [3]

I would appreciate it if you took some time to look at this. I tried to make it sound as personal as possible and still maintain Stanford standards. I hope that worked. I also seem to have written over the character limit, so if you could look into what I could afford to delete, that would be great. Criticisms are welcomed, people.

QUESTION: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Hi roomie,

First off, I'd like to tell you that unnecessary drama and I don't walk with our fingers intertwined, because I'd rather not portray Soap Opera angst in my real life. Instead, I prefer grasping the joyful moments before they manage to escape. I am very sorry to inform you that my traits clash with each other, bringing various opposing personalities together to form the quirky, hopefully likable, person that I am. My idiosyncrasy of bursting out into spontaneous conversations provides an eccentric edge to my traits.

I have a deep passion for paintings and artists, but my drawing talents are limited to stick men. Honestly, my fascination in the arts was ignited after reading the Da Vinci Code (one of my ultimate favorite books), and it also attracted me to cryptography. The relish I possess towards mysteries and pyramids run through my veins, as Egyptian traits conquer my blood.

One of the most unusual attributes about me is my heritage. When people hear the place where my mother hails from, eyebrows are raised and various questions are asked. I'm the daughter of an Egyptian and a Turkestani, the recipient of numerous traits from both countries.

I find no interest in watching any form of sports, but I cannot begin to illustrate how much satisfaction I receive while I participate in them. However, I also find complete elation in reading books, especially ones that challenge my thoughts.

An obsession of mine is to be able to print memories in the lives of other people. I simply cannot permit one day to pass while I follow a certain routine. How could I enjoy every gratification that life has to offer if I walk along the same path every single day. As for my interests, I am fond of trying out new activities; therefore it wouldn't be a dilemma if you possessed different hobbies. As cliche as it sounds, I am almost positive that we'll "click together brilliantly."

I imagine that the word "stereotype" doesn't lie within me from everything I've mentioned above, and I cherish the feeling of enjoying a part of every world brought before me. It'll be a long walk down the path to graduation, and I hope, or I am most certain, that our lives will be joined with blissful moments as smiles are glued to our lips.
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