Ninjawesome
Dec 27, 2010
Undergraduate / UVA- What is your favorite word and why- Coherence [16]
Here's what I'm getting:
-You like the word coherence because the word applies to you and the way you like having things ordered and simple.
"Simply the definition of a word is what most people seek in life."
-If you say "the word" it seems as though there is a set word everyone is looking for.
Revision of biggly's revision: "I make lists frequently "
-"frequent lists" would mean that the lists are frequent rather than the idea that you make lists frequently.
I'd stick with "Conventionally, however, it means..."
-This gives the reader the notion that the conventional definition is different from the literal definition.
I'm struggling to find a way you could add something, but as a suggestion may I suggest wrapping the response up with a sentence using "coherence" again? Towards the end it seems like you're deviating from the prompt. Again, this is if you feel that you still need something. Otherwise, it sounds great!
Here's what I'm getting:
-You like the word coherence because the word applies to you and the way you like having things ordered and simple.
"Simply the definition of a word is what most people seek in life."
-If you say "the word" it seems as though there is a set word everyone is looking for.
Revision of biggly's revision: "I make lists frequently "
-"frequent lists" would mean that the lists are frequent rather than the idea that you make lists frequently.
I'd stick with "Conventionally, however, it means..."
-This gives the reader the notion that the conventional definition is different from the literal definition.
I'm struggling to find a way you could add something, but as a suggestion may I suggest wrapping the response up with a sentence using "coherence" again? Towards the end it seems like you're deviating from the prompt. Again, this is if you feel that you still need something. Otherwise, it sounds great!
