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Feb 22, 2011
Scholarship / My Dad - family member that has been influential in your life [5]

Is this essay supposed to be informal? "Although he works his butt off" may be way too informal for certain readers.

The driving reason behind my high school success is my father. As I am entering into adulthood, I have come to appreciate just how hard my dad has worked for my family. He works every day for 12 hours including weekends my whole life. For the first half of my life he worked the same schedule while spending 3 hours traveling to and from work. The most remarkable trait in my dad is that he has never once complained about working. He gets up at two in the morning and heads in to work without a word of protest. Although he has a tough job , he comes home every day in a great mood and tries his best to make it out to all of my athletic and academic events. I could never thank him enough in words, so I show my appreciation for him in my school work. I study hard so that I can have a different life than my dad, so that I can spend more time with my family than he ever could. I do it all for him.
bnguyen29   
Feb 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / Toefl : Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students.. [6]

"We all know that a country must have many political parties to sustain the stability of society": I think this is a sweeping statement. If you are from China, there is only one political party, but the society is still pretty stable because the government maintains their authority with the military.

"In the following, I'll state my opinion.": I think you do not need this sentence. I would be ok to end with the sentence right before this.

Your first argument is not particularly strong. If the teacher was playing devil's advocate, wouldn't that be beneficial to the students because that would stimulate them to think of objections to the teacher's supposing point of view?

Your third argument can be further developed as well. Is there a word limit on this essay?
bnguyen29   
Jan 5, 2011
Undergraduate / "a large and intimate research institution" - the most appealing about Columbia [4]

Thank you very much for your suggestions. Do you think I should keep my writing the way it is or should make it something creative like a personal statement?

Also, I am writing the "Why transfer" essay for CommonApp. How specific should I be with the CommonApp essay without being redundant?
bnguyen29   
Jan 5, 2011
Undergraduate / "a large and intimate research institution" - the most appealing about Columbia [4]

I am applying for transfer to Columbia University. I do not know how I should approach the prompt. Should I write it as in a personal statement or as in a straightforward essay explaining the specifics of Columbia? Thank you very much.

"Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why" (250 words)

Columbia attracts me because the university is a large research institution, yet still maintains the intimacy of an undergraduate liberal arts environment. Since the student-faculty ratio is 6:1 and nearly eighty percent of classes offered to undergraduates have fewer than 20 students, Columbia promotes close relationship between students and faculty, allowing undergraduates to reap the benefits of intellectual mentorship.

The diversity being offered at Columbia matches my expectations of an undergraduate experience. Columbia is not only diverse in demographics, as evident in the second largest international student body in the United States, but also in thoughts. The different ideas coming from an internationally conscious student body stimulate constant exchanges among motivated and brilliant Columbians and create an environment conducive to learning.

The Columbia Political Science Department, which is notably strong in International Politics and Political Theory, provides the resources for me to pursue interests in how ancient and contemporary political thoughts shape China's foreign policy in East Asia from many perspectives. The Weatherhead East Asian Institute, which houses the renowned The C.V. Starr East Asian Library, dedicates exclusively to the study of modern Asia and sponsors programs that feature notable academia such as Andrew Nathan. I also get to hear policy-makers to speak about politics in practice through the annual World Leaders Forum. On top of that, the Columbia East Asia Review serves as an outlet for undergraduates to write and learn from each other. There is truly no better college than Columbia for me. For these reasons, I would be honored to join the Columbia community.
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