Graduate / Adversity (that pain strengthened me) + MCSSM (I love to learn) [NEW]

1) Have you had any adversity in your life that you want to explain?
Ever since I was young, I had no recollection of what it was like to have both parents in your life. My mom and dad divorced when I was a baby, and since then I have had very little contact with my father. My mother, having never finished college, worked frequently in order to support us. This made me bitter. I began to focus my bitter feelings solely on my father, who I had believed to have been the cause for all of the hardships both my mother and I have faced. I was not my father's only child. I have met all of my siblings at least twice; since then I have rarely seen them otherwise. This is what caused my wish for a sibling from my mother. I got my wish, which resulted in my mother being left by her boyfriend upon discovering her pregnancy. Knowing that she was unable to care for two children on her own without a better paying job, we moved to North Carolina with my grandparents. The move was hard for me with so much change happening, seeing as I was also becoming an older sister.

Later, my father moved down to Wilmington, North Carolina with another younger sibling that I had only recently found out that I had in the first place. When he moved to North Carolina, I decided I would give him a chance at a relationship with me. However, my father betrayed by trust time and time again, and that eventually led to our tense relationship today. The relationship with my father is a painful subject. Our relationship difficulties have affected my ability to come in contact with my other siblings, whom I haven't seen in years. It hurts me to not be able to be there for m younger sister in Wilmington, and not be able to congratulate my older sister for her accomplishments, and to support my younger brother, who has a mental disability; they both live in Massachusetts.

Without a second source of income, finances were always tight. That is what prompted my mother to start working nights at the local hospital, and since then I have been responsible for taking care of my sister at night, and also preparing the both of us for school in the morning. Though this happens on an average of four days a week, it still can become very stressful and puts strain on everyone in the house. It especially affects my ability to do my extracurricular activities. Because my mom must go to work close to the time when many clubs begin, I am unable to attend many of them, such as the community service clubs, which begin at a late hour. However, I never, ever blame my mother for these difficulties. She does and outstanding job as a mother, and I admire her so much.

To this day, I have a very tense relationship with my father, and I doubt that will ever change. However, I will do my best in order to someday visit with my siblings so that I may have a relationship with them, whether that means having to be around my father or not. I'm willing to forgive, but the pain that he caused me and my mother is something that I will never forget. That pain, though unfortunate, has strengthened me and developed me into the person that I am today, and therefore is something worth remembering.

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2)What else do you want to make sure the NCSSM selection committee knows about you?

I would like the NCSSM committee to know how much I love to learn and how much I yearn to become the best that I can become in this world. For me, knowing just how privileged I am to live in a country with free education, school isn't just a place of learning. It is a place of endless opportunity and experiences that will benefit me in life. I want more than anything to make a difference in the world today using the knowledge that I attain during my studies. I want to be able to save lives and give back to my community. I feel that through science, I will be able to change the lives of many for the better. I am an extremely hard working individual who will do all that it takes to become successful and will not shirk any duties that befall on me. I would be absolutely humbled to be accepted into NCSSM, and should I be accepted, I assure you that all expectations will be met, and that you will have a student who will help to maintain the esteemed status of your school. Thank you so much for your time.

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