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hg726   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Modern Physics, sports, location" - Supplement , WHY Stanford. [7]

Thanks sid ! its kind of a new thing for me to write essays in english, but that's why I'm here. Would you mind telling me which verbs are the ones causing problems?? a little editing perhaps ?? I'll get back to yours !
hg726   
Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Modern Physics, sports, location" - Supplement , WHY Stanford. [7]

I think this one is a lot better plz give a glance

Quantum Mechanics, Einstein's Relativity, or maybe Newtonian Mechanics, can easily be seen as a bunch of chaotic numbers without the proper preparation. My preparation is Leonard Susskind's YouTube course. Somewhere in my junior year I became use to watch this courses until I fell asleep. "I could Picture me in that class" I said to myself.

My interest in finance wasn't any love at first sight story, but through many years and enough experience, now I'm sure that is what I want to do. At Stanford I get the chance to study where the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has been cradle of the great Nobel's in economics of the Stanford Scholar community.

At Stanford, I see myself exploring impossible otherwise back in Chile, like the Multidisciplinary Research Initiatives Opportunities linking Natural science with Social science, Economics and Sociology or maybe finance and Politics. Hopefully one day I can be part of the International Initiative.

I really enjoy being near big cities, I'll admit it: I'm a city mouse. My whole life I've been in love with major cities. Maybe it's because I'm a tech addict and being right in the middle of a tech-flourishing machine like San Francisco makes me smile.

I believe I need a place where challenges are a must. A place where diverse classes; make diverse ideas. A place where I can state: I once saw this on YouTube. A place like Stanford.
hg726   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Modern Physics, sports, location" - Supplement , WHY Stanford. [7]

check it out and be brutal guys !
DUE TOMORROW!!

I have a Physics test coming up, what should I do? I'm going to check Leonard Susskind's Modern Physics course on YouTube. After a while I became use to watch the courses until I fell asleep, I enjoyed the professor's charisma, and the way he conducted the classes. "I could picture myself in that class" I said to myself.

The small classes are the perfect opportunity to express myself and to be a part of the class, tending to avoid classes that are too passive; and if the class is diverse, that means diverse points of view, making it even more interesting. Another thing great thing are sports, definitely be involved with sports in Sanford; the perfect way to begin or end the day.

Another thing that I find appealing is the access to the six graduate schools, being my great interest in finance; I get the chance to be were the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has held the great Nobel Prizes of the Stanford Scholar community.

About the location, well, I'll admit it: I am a city mouse. Nothings gets me better than big cities and their active urban life, so San Francisco will make me feel like home.

I hope I can be able to walk into a classroom and say that one day I watched this on YouTube.
hg726   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "I am Optimistic" - academic interests, perspectives COMMON APP Essay [3]

Ok, I get it your optimistic, but it doesn't sound like it... I believe you should focus and what makes you unique, and not so much about how high school was like 4 u.

Try to focus on the prompt -----> DIVERSITY, why is diversity IMPORTANT to you and what can YOU bring to a diverse college atmosphere. It seems to indirect for me, I don't get the main idea.

I don't mean to be rude, this would be an award winning poem, but could be better as a college admission essay.
I'm just trying to help
Cheers for Chile and GOOD LUCK !
hg726   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Heroin; to study psychology" - Stanford intellectually engaging activity [3]

I thinks its quite good. But maybe a little too general, talk a little more about the actual experience that you found intellectually engaging, and explain why in fact it was intellectually engaging. Was it the heroin class? or Mr.Kulkarni's class in general? it's a little confusing. Focus on the topic of the essay, with clear details.

hope this helps
GOOD LUCK!
hg726   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / Physics teacher -Intellectual vitality & a "hunch" type of guy - roommate [NEW]

Im an International student so my writing isn't the best
PLZ BE BRUTAL on your editing thank you so much!

Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

Each year, our Physics teacher gives a chance to improve a grade, if you can come up with a project that is different and challenging. So I took the challenge.

It happens that I did very well at the class, I didn't actually need to improve any grade, but I just enjoy challenging science projects. So I spoke to my professor and he told me to pick a partner. Thankfully a very good friend of mine is an actual genius at math and physics so I talked him into the project. We came up with two amazing projects, first a Nuclear Fusion Reactor and a Tesla Coil, the Reactor was a the one I wanted to do the most, but it demanded knowledge that I didn't have so sadly we had to put it away. Now the Tesla coil seemed more plausible, so we decided to do it.

The interesting thing here is that I really wasn't very sure about what I was doing; I could've taken ages to finish it by myself. Even though I had never been more motivated, I realized that I didn't have the knowledge or the experience to do it by myself. Finally we finished our Tesla Coil and the results were amazing. But the greatest lesson was that, despite me being more passionate than ever about any project, without my partner's knowledge it couldn't have been possible. I Learned that passion alone, can be a disaster without the proper preparation, so the next time I feel the same passion, I want Stanford to give me the tools, so I can be ready to take on any challenge.

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Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better

Hola! roommie,
You may think that me being from Chile will make us completely different, but trust me when I tell you that I am probably very similar to you in some way.

My friends would consider me as a "hunch" type of guy. Usually when I have a feeling about something, I follow through, maybe that's why I've tried so many different things. From skydiving to drumming, any attempts to classify me are just not plausible.

Well, first, it's nearly impossible to make me put my Iphone down; I check it literally a hundred times each day. Mainly for the news and the email, but if you are such a tech addict as myself you'll know what I'm talking about!

One thing that may strike you about me, is my diverse musical taste, and how emotional I can get with songs; you can easily get me weeping with the Titanic Theme song. My guitar will probably join us in our free time. I'm not a bad singer though, but with my guitar, I can play virtually anything, from Coldplay to Chris Brown.

On the other side, I'm quite an athletic type guy, and I find sports super fun, maybe we can go for a jog or just hit the gym, after a long study streak.

Having said that, I look forward to meeting you, and I am sure we'll have the best time at Stanford!
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