Undergraduate / "it's easy to fall in love" - Why Columbia? [10]

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Stepping onto campus for the first time [last summer] , it was easy to fall in love. I had once heard Columbia referred to as "an oasis of the big city," but ...

Their pride in Columbia greatly appealed to me; at the end of the day ,(I don't quite understand..you could just say In the end, or After all,) I want to be proud of the school that I attend. I want to feel like I ambe part of the community. I have visited Columbia several times ever since, and with each visit my perception of the community grows better and better. More than anything, I want ...

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