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liloyang   
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Camp and Death" - Summer Essay for Princeton [7]

I was one of the ten counselors at the temple's annual summer camp for kids.

I like your essay maybe because I have some similar experience. And I agree with the thedarktiger's editings.
For the ending, it is a little too bold and seems incomplete, try to indicate what you have learned from the experience, and try making a clear connection between the two events.Since you have the word limit, maybe cut off some of the details in the second paragraph as well.

Thx for editing my essay =)
liloyang   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "Interested in Applied Math and people" - Why Brown [4]

Brown is my dream school, I really want to make my why Brown special, so I wrote a poem. I know it's very risky, and here is my poem.

Dear Brown,
I did research on many top universities:
Columbia is located in the glamorous NYC;
Chicago offers rigorous core courses;
MIT has many competitive USAMO winners.
But,
I choose Brown.
Providence, though not as cosmopolitan as NYC, has its own condensed beauty.
I want to be in an idealistic and unique city atmosphere; I want to feel the beauty of nature.
Brown, though it does not have as many core courses as Chicago, prepares students for their future.
Forced to learn things simply for exams in China, I want the freedom to choose my classes and enthusiastically pursue my interests. I want to enjoy my education.

Brown, though it may not have as many USAMO winners as MIT, has collaborative and passionate students.
Having lived in a cutthroat environment, I want to sit with talented people, exchange ideas and get inspired.
I choose Brown.
Interested in Applied Math, I want to have the interaction of people with varied scientific interest provided by Brown's separate Applied Math department.
I choose Brown.
---a Brown applicant
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