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Jan 1, 2011
Undergraduate / "Swim Team's swimming pool" - University of Michigan Community Essay [3]
Every day, when I jump into the icy waters of the --- Swim Team's swimming pool, I feel a sense of belonging. I joined the during the swim season of my junior year and quickly found my niche there, surrounded by people who shared my mentality. Everyone wanted to be there and improve themselves. If not for the people around me, enduring the monotony of swimming back and forth would be dreadful. Thankfully, my teammates share the same values as I do. We all have our reasons for swimming, whether they be fame, scholarships, or staying in shape, but the unifying reason that keeps us coming back is dedication.
Looking back, I can credit my success in swimming to this dedication. Without the drive required to devote myself to swimming, I would never have been able to win the Most Valuable Swimmer Award or persevere through practices. I discovered an inner core of strength that pushed me further than I thought possible. The most important thing I learned from joining the Armada Swim Club was that we are able to transcend our limits. By stepping out of my comfort zone, I undertook a completely new experience. I gained confidence in my ability to handle hardship. I grew as a person by realizing that challenges are taken one step at a time. My determination and dedication have been my defining traits and have aided me through difficulties in my life.
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This is a rough draft and I am open to any suggestions.
Every day, when I jump into the icy waters of the --- Swim Team's swimming pool, I feel a sense of belonging. I joined the during the swim season of my junior year and quickly found my niche there, surrounded by people who shared my mentality. Everyone wanted to be there and improve themselves. If not for the people around me, enduring the monotony of swimming back and forth would be dreadful. Thankfully, my teammates share the same values as I do. We all have our reasons for swimming, whether they be fame, scholarships, or staying in shape, but the unifying reason that keeps us coming back is dedication.
Looking back, I can credit my success in swimming to this dedication. Without the drive required to devote myself to swimming, I would never have been able to win the Most Valuable Swimmer Award or persevere through practices. I discovered an inner core of strength that pushed me further than I thought possible. The most important thing I learned from joining the Armada Swim Club was that we are able to transcend our limits. By stepping out of my comfort zone, I undertook a completely new experience. I gained confidence in my ability to handle hardship. I grew as a person by realizing that challenges are taken one step at a time. My determination and dedication have been my defining traits and have aided me through difficulties in my life.
(241 words)
This is a rough draft and I am open to any suggestions.
