Undergraduate / Georgetown: What are your influences for studying business? [5]

I like how you are confident in yourself and believe you can make a change.

Undergraduate / College Essay Homeschooled/diabetes [5]

I have been homeschooled since the 10th grade when I was diagnosed with type one diabetes. I was devastated. Painful blood glucose samples had to be taken every two hours, giving myself four insulin shots a day and learning to count carbohydrates, how could this be happening to me? I was not able to keep up with my peers physically, so I chose to withdraw socially and began to study at home.

After five months of adjustment, I began to get my life back to normal. Finally, back on a normal schedule again, I no longer had to wake up every two hours at night, was a relief. Concentrating on schoolwork was a priority; I did not want to get behind my classmates. My energy levels were at an all time high; I was exercising and riding my horse again. I was fortunate to find a part-time job at a local university two afternoons a week.

Although diabetes has complicated my life, it has given me a new strength to challenge any problem or issue that comes my way. For this reason, I have chosen to study in the health field. Studying nursing at Virginia Commonwealth University would allow me to explore many opportunities that await me. I will be exposed to a stimulating environment that will cultivate a superior education in the medical field, as well as take advantage of the many resources Virginia Commonwealth University and Richmond have to offer.

Last year, I decided to take a class at a local community college. I was concerned I might not be prepared as other students since I was homeschooled. However, I discovered that homeschooling could not have prepared me more for college; both require self discipline and motivation.

Should I omit:

"I no longer had to wake up every two hours at night, was a relief"

Undergraduate / College Essay Homeschooled/diabetes [5]

thanks! here is the update

I have been homeschooled since the 10th grade when I was diagnosed with type one diabetes. I was devastated, how could this be happening to me? Taking painful blood glucose samples every two hour and giving myself four insulin shots a day, and changing my diet was something I never imagined would be part of my life. I had to learn to count carbohydrates and had to give up the food I loved most, pasta. I was not able to keep up with my peers physically, so I chose to withdraw socially and began to study at home.

After five months of adjustment, I began to get my life back to normal. Finally I was on a normal schedule again. I no longer had to wake up every two hours at night, which was a relief. Concentrating on schoolwork was a priority; I did not want to get behind my classmates. My energy levels were at an all time high; I was exercising and riding my horse again. I was fortunate to find a part-time job at a local university two afternoons a week.

Although diabetes has complicated my life, it has given me a new strength to challenge any problem or issue that comes my way. For this reason, I have chosen study in the health field. Studying nursing at Virginia Commonwealth University would allow me to explore many opportunities that await me. I will be exposed to a stimulating environment that will cultivate a superior education in the medical field, as well as take advantage of the many resources Virginia Commonwealth University and Richmond have to offer.

Last year, I decided to take a class at a local community college. I was concerned I might not be prepared as other students since I was homeschooled. However, I discovered that homeschooling could not have prepared me more for college; both require self discipline and motivation.

I still need to have 250-300 words..I now have 316.