geetakaradkhele
Feb 27, 2011
Writing Feedback / Some people believe in making large amount of money while others don't care about it [3]
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some people think that Money is the most crucial part of human life, without it no one can think about life, i.e.without money life would be an ocean without water. Where as few people consider it a trivial part in human life.
In today's society, everybody is running in the competition of making money i.e. in earning money because money is the thing that can give you a luxurious life,the status and the power in the society . Everybody dreams about a fairy tale life , it includes big mansions, fleet of imported cars, expensive jewelery , exclusive vacations etc and one could easily get all these things by nothing but money only. In our society , value of a person is always evaluated by his/ her bank balance, so the person having money could get a status in this society and last but not the least , power is nothing but the support of society. we are seeing this in the U.P. and Bihar, how one person can make all the society to dance on their tune , just because of money.
Where as, there are still few people who are satisfied by earning a small amount of money because they believe in simple living .food, shelter and clothes are the basic need of a human being and they are happy by fulfilling our basic needs .
Though large amount of money gives people a materialistic life , status and power , i WOULD PREFER TO EARN A COMFORTABLE LIVING because I believe in " simple living and high thinking" and there is no end for greediness.
pls make correction...help me to improve my writing skills.
some people think that Money is the most crucial part of human life, without it no one can think about life, i.e.without money life would be an ocean without water. Where as few people consider it a trivial part in human life.
In today's society, everybody is running in the competition of making money i.e. in earning money because money is the thing that can give you a luxurious life,the status and the power in the society . Everybody dreams about a fairy tale life , it includes big mansions, fleet of imported cars, expensive jewelery , exclusive vacations etc and one could easily get all these things by nothing but money only. In our society , value of a person is always evaluated by his/ her bank balance, so the person having money could get a status in this society and last but not the least , power is nothing but the support of society. we are seeing this in the U.P. and Bihar, how one person can make all the society to dance on their tune , just because of money.
Where as, there are still few people who are satisfied by earning a small amount of money because they believe in simple living .food, shelter and clothes are the basic need of a human being and they are happy by fulfilling our basic needs .
Though large amount of money gives people a materialistic life , status and power , i WOULD PREFER TO EARN A COMFORTABLE LIVING because I believe in " simple living and high thinking" and there is no end for greediness.