Writing Feedback / Some people believe in making large amount of money while others don't care about it [3]

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some people think that Money is the most crucial part of human life, without it no one can think about life, i.e.without money life would be an ocean without water. Where as few people consider it a trivial part in human life.

In today's society, everybody is running in the competition of making money i.e. in earning money because money is the thing that can give you a luxurious life,the status and the power in the society . Everybody dreams about a fairy tale life , it includes big mansions, fleet of imported cars, expensive jewelery , exclusive vacations etc and one could easily get all these things by nothing but money only. In our society , value of a person is always evaluated by his/ her bank balance, so the person having money could get a status in this society and last but not the least , power is nothing but the support of society. we are seeing this in the U.P. and Bihar, how one person can make all the society to dance on their tune , just because of money.

Where as, there are still few people who are satisfied by earning a small amount of money because they believe in simple living .food, shelter and clothes are the basic need of a human being and they are happy by fulfilling our basic needs .

Though large amount of money gives people a materialistic life , status and power , i WOULD PREFER TO EARN A COMFORTABLE LIVING because I believe in " simple living and high thinking" and there is no end for greediness.

Writing Feedback / (love, care, family) - should pets be treated as family members [4]

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actually before starting my essay, i would like to tell you that I am not good enough in english...so pls help me to improve...waiting for your suggestions.

From ancient times , human being have been living in groups because he is a social animal.As the development occurred, these groups were replaced by families.Earlier there were joint families, but due to industrialization and other requirements, these families are getting settled to different places and forming their nuclear family.

Though this industrialization and modern era has given all the materialistic happiness to humans , it create scarcity of most important thing for human being and that is ...love, care, affection and emotional support...what a family can give ." Need is the mother of all inventions", humans are looking at pets for all this emotional need...so I think pets should treated as a family members because they can give us all these things what a family can...love , care, support,protection.

I think if you are looking for a true love ...pets are the only source for it except your family obviously...because they never expect any thing form you except love and love only .May be their way to express it is different but you can feel that warmth in their love.

In today's fast life, when everybody is busy in their life ...pets can accompany you as a best friend, a supporter etc. they can not only be best friend of you but in many cases of physical disabilities and mentally retarded case, the help them in their regular activities..such as to give them few things, help them to cross the road etc...In fact , recently thee was an incident in newyork ,where a dog had saved his masters life , by calling an ambulance when his master had got a heart attack.

Research also proved that if you want to release your mental stress, it would be a better option to keep a pet, because their playful activities help to secrete few hormones...that causes release of stress

Family is where we can get love , care ,mental -physical support and I think pets are the storehouse of all these things...so they should be treated as your family.