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Posts by butterbescotch
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Last Post: May 19, 2011
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butterbescotch   
Apr 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / People who have different interest are less likely to be an ally [4]

Allies are ideal. They are useful in any ways. They can ease your tasks and increase your self-worth. However, you may be better off choosing allies with the same interest. People who have different concepts, availability and attitude are better off going solo.

If you have different interests, you have different concept of ideas. One may prefer to spend weekend sitting in the couch, eating popcorn and watching movies. The other may prefer playing basketball and get his body all worked up. As you contemplate on choices, you might lead to an argument.

People have different interests have different availability*. People who have interest in reading and writing can be in their work for days and weeks and is subject to extension. Their work may or may not be pleasing until then. On the other hand, people who have interest in social interaction will choose any time to go out. Thus, even though you may agree on a decision, they are probably time you have to do it alone.

Lastly, people who have different interest are less likely to please their partners. If a person has no knowledge on other people's work, he can't make a good opinion or it may lead to lies. They can't also talk freely on their selves because one may consider it a rant while the other as a rave.

Having an ally has many benefits. But having the perfect one is hard. You should choose the people to work with for if you are not careful you may lead to a relationship - enemies.

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*Do you have other term for this? I think this is a bit off.
Also any thoughts on improving the essay or is it just enough for the subject?

Let me know.
butterbescotch   
Apr 27, 2011
Writing Feedback / there will always be a curse out of it; Computer Literacy is a Curse [6]

My mother always calls me when she is in the front of computer. Her annoying and yet pleading voice kept me detached in everything I do. She asks question I've already answered and demonstrated, numerous times. It is always how to log-in on Facebook, how to upload a photo, how to find the address bar or, in worse cases, how to turn on the computer. She is persistent to learn but I was not persistent to teach.

At first, I was eager to share my knowledge. After all, whose children don't want to impress their parents? I was enthralled to the idea. I was even making lesson plan and carefully planning what topics to be discuss per day, like teachers do. It wasn't long before I realized that my efforts are futile. My mother couldn't digest all the teachings. I couldn't figure out what went wrong and why. Eventually, I pretended not to hear any commands on the fort coming nights.

Well, not all parents share this trait, even my fellow peers belong to this category. You volunteered to answer and the next thing you know you are drowned by questions. They expect you to answer every single one of their queries. Even if you did, the same question appears in the next few months with the same person who asked it. It is like an obligation to be computer literate rather than an asset.

I was patient in all aspects of life but they took that attribute from me. To be a teacher was my childhood dream and my hero. But after having a glimpse of its insanity, I vowed not be one. Out of the questions, I was tempted to write books with titles like Mouse for Dummies, Taskbar for Dummies and the like. I fancied how much sales I will make.

In this modern world, knowing how to use computer is useful. Many people are enrolled in a computer course. They are widely used whether in business or in personal purposes. However, no matter how a blessing it is, there will always be a curse out of it.

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Thanks for reading! Let me know what your thoughts.
butterbescotch   
Apr 29, 2011
Writing Feedback / Language Breakdown in Philippines (we have more or less 130 languages) [3]

In the Philippines, a country with 7,107 islands, we have more or less 130 languages. Only thirteen are well known. I happened to speak Cebuano, my dialect. It was widely spoken to our village and I grew with it. If there were a speaker of another dialect, I doubt if he is a commoner. He's either having a vacation or just happens to pass by. Generally, I don't need a dictionary to learn a word since the language had already worn out my ears but, now, I think I need one.

Sitting in a pew, last seat last row, I carefully listened to the priest's sermon. It was about looking what we have done these past few days; I understood that. Then, it was now having a devotion to God; still, I understood that. After a while, the priest started using foreign words. I was utterly confused and what was more confusing was nobody felt the same way as I did.

After the mass, I asked my father what they were. I learned the meaning but the words were not new. Then, I realized I have been using some of them from the past years. How could I ever forget? I'm supposed to remember because it was my dialect. It was like forgetting the words of my favourite song. I can't believe it.

I also noticed that I have been struggling in holding a discussion because I kept getting tongue tied. I had also trouble finding words to express my thoughts. In result, I frequent on code switching to save the conversation from silence.

Being expose to the English language may well be the reason. Whenever I entered to a forum site it was always English restricted. All of the books I have read were in English, which was also used whenever our teachers discourse with us. I guess I shouldn't be surprise to be obsessed in English, that I prefer it besides my dialect. After all that was our education system was aiming: To be fluent in English, so we can be globally competitive.

I'm not the only one having this dilemma. My classmates are slowly affected by it, though they rarely notice. In academic writing and scholarship essays, yes it is really helpful. It was also helpful in communicating to other people outside the country. But learning too much from this language had me detached to my dialect. Slowly, I had been isolated to other local conversation. As far as socialization is involved, this was not good.

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Thanks for reading. Any thoughts for improvement?
butterbescotch   
May 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / children working at the early ages [8]

@Scientiana

What's wrong with They're?

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@Topic.

Don't be anti-climatic. Don't use words like "To summarize", "I myself prefer the second view that". Let your writing speak.

Also, your first paragraph is just a restatement of the prompt. It does nothing to introduce the topic but rather introduce what you're decision. Use an opening like "Children play, most of the times. Some living in countries like X, Y, Z, (Research your topic.) are engaged in tough labor both for practice and need." I reckon you're using a template or following the examples of a book but if you can try to make you're own because your essay looks like everyone else. Don't take it personally.

Keep it up!

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