Undergraduate / "my goal is to become an Esthetician" - Educational and Career Goals Essay [4]

*Make a brief statement or summary of your educational and career objectives and long-term goals along with the steps you will take to achieve them.

I'm writing an essay for a scholarship and this is one of the assignments. I'd like any adivce. Don't really know if I answered the topic correctly?

It is my life-long goal to become an Esthetician. Since very early in my life, I have been attracted to the beauty industry. Becoming someone capable of helping individuals in ways that is not possible with other careers would bring me so much joy and honor. I would love to attain a career that allows me to share and express my passion and artistic abilities with the public. To achieve my goal, I have researched many schools and found that Marinello School of Beauty has the programs I am looking for. By attending, it will allow me to pursue my dream of having the power of being able to transform and improve a person's appearance and self-confidence. With the knowledge I would learn, I would gain a career I would love and enjoy for the rest of my life. I know that this school will transform me into the successful professional that I know I can be. Using the skills I acquired, I would be eligible to work at any spa or salon I desired. Therefore, I am excitingly willing to participate in the necessary education and training which are needed to complete for my career. I am very committed to fulfilling my dreams and as so, I will push myself in all the ways to succeed and graduate so that I may fulfill my educational and career goals and be a proud part of the beauty industry.