lsncatherine
Mar 12, 2011
Undergraduate / "Bright personality, knowledge and soccer team" - for UBC--Bachelor of Science [3]
EF_Kevin
Thanks a lot! It's really helpful! ^^
The idea about paragraphs is excellent!
You correct about my essay is too abstract. But I don't know how to fix it. I afraid that if I use examples, it will take too much word. I mean I'm not sure what should I say and what shouldn't exactly. Could you please explain that further? ? You said I need say something about what I want to do. Did you mean by getting a job? I just mentioned a little bot about job. Same thing again, I don't know how to say it briefly. One more thing, what if I put into 2 paragraph? A paragraph about in courses life and another about out of courses.
EF_Kevin
Thanks a lot! It's really helpful! ^^
The idea about paragraphs is excellent!
You correct about my essay is too abstract. But I don't know how to fix it. I afraid that if I use examples, it will take too much word. I mean I'm not sure what should I say and what shouldn't exactly. Could you please explain that further? ? You said I need say something about what I want to do. Did you mean by getting a job? I just mentioned a little bot about job. Same thing again, I don't know how to say it briefly. One more thing, what if I put into 2 paragraph? A paragraph about in courses life and another about out of courses.