Undergraduate / "Physics was draining my mind" - Academic Achivement [5]

It was so kind of Rajiv and the ability to correcting an essay like this.

There is one thing you can make your essay flow more dramatically to impress the readers; especially, those admission officers who need to read thoudsnad of essay everyday. Whose essay can standout in such limited words depends on who can use the climax more dramtic to influence reder's emotion.

Deepen your struggle description, and ending in a high note of acing your study with the score you achieved would make this short essay a hearttouching story.