Writing Feedback / Definition Essay "A Good Mother" [3]

I need a little help with my definition essay of "A Good Mother". There are a couple of points my professor wants me to work on but I'm having a hard time coming up with anything. First I will post the points he wants me to work on and then the essay. Any suggestions will be very helpful!

Make sure you map out your essay in your introduction. You have solid points, but they need to be introduced earlier.

For each example, make sure you explain the consequences of that example. For example, in your first body paragraph, you write "A child could destroy her most prized possession, but she will still have a smile on her face because her child is safe. Often, when a child gets upset one says and does hurtful things, and yet a mother forgives and forgets. A mother's child grows and becomes an adult, and one might make decisions she might not agree with, but she will still love her child and be there when needed." What are the consequences of a mother acting like this and how does this help to define a mother

A Good Mother

Every mother has a moment in her life where she remembers every detail. She remembers the date, time, and place for the rest of her life multiplied by how many children she has. It is the moment when she gave birth to her child. At that moment, she makes a promise to herself and her child that she would be a good mother. A good mother has many defining traits, unconditional love, support, and being a good role model.

A good mother has a never-ending supply of unconditional love. A child could destroy her most prized possession, but she will still have a smile on her face because her child is safe. Often, when a child gets upset one says and does hurtful things, and yet a mother forgives and forgets. A mother's child grows and becomes an adult, and one might make decisions she might not agree with, but she will still love her child and be there when needed. No matter what, a good mother will always have unconditional love for her child.

A child needs support in a variety of ways, and a good mother is there to offer all of the support needed. Of course, a mother is there to support her child financially as best she can; she will always provide for her child to the best of her ability. A mother also provides the emotional support that her child needs; she is always there when her child may need a kiss on an injury, or simply an extra hug as they get off the bus. In addition, it is important for a mother to support her child's interest in extracurricular activities; sometimes that may require driving to practices and events or even encouraging her child to practice at home. Without the support of a good mother a child may squander through life never living up to his or her full potential.

Since children learn by example, it is important for a good mother to be a good role model. A good mother will show respect to her family, friends, and strangers; by showing all of them respect she teaches her children to be respectful. When a mother stands up for what she believes in, it gives her child strength and confidence to be an independent individual. A good mother will always be responsible for her actions and admit mistakes when she makes them. Being responsible shows her child that it is wise to think twice about choices one would make because he or she would ultimately be responsible for the outcome. Every child needs a good role model to look up to and a good mother is just that.

Children learn what they live, so when they are exposed to unconditional love, support, and a good role model, that is who they become. A mother can see her success of being a good mother in the product of her child. A good mother creates loving, supportive, and stand-up people; that is what every good mother wants her child to become. Good mothers possess all three of these defining traits that people can see in every mother.