These core concepts work hand in hand enabling a high school student to explore life as a college student. I know I am this person waiting to fulfill my goals as a PSEO student.
I think these sentences should be revised so that they do not just say general things... revise them to say something specific about your mission... what are you determined to do?
I believe as a high school student, I have what it takes to be successful at University of Minnesota. At this school, I hope to be able to explore a variety of topics. I also know that I am present with the opportunity to take any classes I want and be taught by some of ...----This paragraph is too general, too. I want to see some specific examples of the subjects that interest you most. What are some of the careers you have in mind? Look to the future, and meditate on your interests.
And if you want to say something nice about the faculty, you should say something specific about a particular faculty member whose research/writing you admire.
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You have great enthusiasm!