Posts by imissflorida

imissflorida

Apr 20, 2011

Scholarship / Lifetime struggles of an immigrant and how you overcame them (too negative?) [9]

hi kevin thanks for the help but this is for a scholarship essay not admissions. do you think i should include my future plans in them as well?

I am donating my kidney to my brother next year and I wanted to include that in my essay. Do you think I should?

imissflorida

Apr 16, 2011

Scholarship / Lifetime struggles of an immigrant and how you overcame them (too negative?) [9]

Yes most of my problems came because I was a minority. Do you think I could shape this essay into a narrative/story-like or should it be more structured?

imissflorida

Apr 16, 2011

Scholarship / "less Hispanics in the Health field" - the field you intend to pursue [3]

"that Hispanics are one of the races to have high risks of health issues"

Hispanic isn't a race. Maybe change it to ethnicity.

imissflorida

Apr 16, 2011

Scholarship / Lifetime struggles of an immigrant and how you overcame them (too negative?) [9]

Hi guys, I just started writing my essay but I don't want to post it here because i'm paranoid. But I need help. The prompt asks to describe a significant struggle and how I have overcome it.

The thing is, my whole life has been a struggle. I am an immigrant, grew up poor, lived in a bad neighborhood and went to a bad school. I later moved up north where I went to an ALL white school and I was the only Hispanic. I was extremely behind academically, spoke bad english and had trouble fitting in because I looked so different.

THEN I started writing about how I overcame my struggles. I studied extremely hard to catch up, took AP classes and speech classes to better my English.

Would my essay be TOO negative? Should I take some of my struggles out? It's hard for me to write just about one specific struggle since it all ties together. Any suggestions?

Thanks for your time!