Shahriar
Apr 28, 2011
Undergraduate / Soccer: I put on my gloves and race to the playground to help my team - something pleasant to me [18]
Hello! I have began my apps early. Please help me the best way you can...be critical (I need it very badly)!
First of all, the things I do for pleasure: playing soccer, sketching, and playing guitar.
Here's what I came up with: (I'm starting with soccer)
Every Friday before sunset, I put on my gloves and race to the playground to help my team in the weekly local soccer match. I play as the goalkeeper-captain. Some of my fondest memories come from soccer: as saving a penalty, engaging in frivolous arguments with my opponent Saad, cheering my teammates scoring a goal. Really, it's exciting when the crowds cheer as my team scores a goal or when I thwart an attempt on goal. Playing soccer also helps me to relax. I also enjoy working with teammates, and the spirit of sportsmanship. (94 words)
Be critical.
Hello! I have began my apps early. Please help me the best way you can...be critical (I need it very badly)!
First of all, the things I do for pleasure: playing soccer, sketching, and playing guitar.
Here's what I came up with: (I'm starting with soccer)
Every Friday before sunset, I put on my gloves and race to the playground to help my team in the weekly local soccer match. I play as the goalkeeper-captain. Some of my fondest memories come from soccer: as saving a penalty, engaging in frivolous arguments with my opponent Saad, cheering my teammates scoring a goal. Really, it's exciting when the crowds cheer as my team scores a goal or when I thwart an attempt on goal. Playing soccer also helps me to relax. I also enjoy working with teammates, and the spirit of sportsmanship. (94 words)
Be critical.