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Posts by awakenlion
Joined: Oct 13, 2008
Last Post: Oct 18, 2008
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awakenlion   
Oct 18, 2008
Undergraduate / Diligent and perseverance are the most important qualities - my statement [NEW]

Diligent and perseverance are the most important qualities that are necessary for me as a student. For the past few years, I knew that I am just merely an average student; however, I never hesitated to compete with other kids. Compete in education has given me a lot of suffers and stressful, but it also has given me tongue of surprises and anticipations. It provides me opportunities to develop myself into a person that can stand on my own in the society. I never want helps or supports from people unless it is impossible for me to go on. It is extremely annoying me if I cannot use my talents and abilities to get thing work the way I want. I am a self-confidence person; I believe that I can do whatever other people able to do. Thus, it evolves me into a mature and independent kid. There was a time that I was struggled with my English class because it was my second language. I did highly well on the homework and class work, however, I wrote poorly essays ever. After the grading period, I ended up getting a C. That was the first C I ever got in my life and I promised to myself that it will never happen again. I was so embarrassed as if I want to . I was not envy of other student because I got lower grade than them, but because I did not have as much opportunities as they have. Nevertheless, I did not take it as a failure of my education; instead I made it as a challenge for myself and set it as the next obstacle that I had to face. The summer of that year, I tried my best to improve my English. I did self-study at home, and read many books. I tried to learn the way people write, how they expressed their feelings, and how their essay structured. After that summer, my writing skill was much better. Although my paper was not as good as the regular student's paper, but somehow, it helped me maintain my competition with them.

Last year, I ended up getting straight A for my English 3 class. I was very proud of myself. I knew that all the educations I earned for the past few months never be wasted. From that point on, I started reading books and learned many new things. I love what I had learn and what I going to learn for my future. Being an independent student, I am very positive. I treat learning as fun activities not the job that I have to do. While getting education, compete with other students has become my hobbies and I always want to be a number one. I love to challenge people, and being challenged. That way I always have to push myself even more so that I can face with my new opponent. To become a successful person I believe that I always need to set my goal higher and higher.
awakenlion   
Oct 13, 2008
Undergraduate / Name a professor with whom you would like to study or conduct research with [5]

it is a good essay
your writing level is way higher than me so you can ignore my comment :)
i think you should add more supports on your main idea. You set out the general statement but i feel that you did not support it strong enough.

About the last paragraph, i think it will appropriate as long as it support the theme and purpose of your essay.

Good job!!!
awakenlion   
Oct 13, 2008
Undergraduate / About my youth and my first visit to the USA - some suggestion pls [NEW]

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. *

Sitting here and writing this paper, I have been thinking about my youth, all the way back to the time I first came to the United States of America. I and my family have been here for four years and we have had a tough time dealing with our new lives. My mother and father have only a high school education level and I had barely finished my seventh grade. No one in our family could either speak or understand English so that had become one of our biggest obstacles.

The first year in the United States was the most challenging year for our family. My parents had worked like machines and did everything that they could do to survive in this new land. Therefore, I promised myself that I would do my best in school and propel my potential to its zenith so that I could fulfill my parents' efforts. I started simultaneously taking many English courses and higher level exams to qualify for AP classes in my school. This helped me achieving more advanced education standard to be qualified for universities. I have worked like a bee to compete with all kinds of people in this mean and inequitable world. Sometimes I felt exhausted, but in my mind, I never failed to embrace my dream. Some of my friends asked me, "What are you trying so hard for? You know that you have no chance to compete with the students that live here for a long time, they have more opportunities than you and all your efforts will be wasted". I immediately responded, "I know that the result of my GPA and SAT score is not as good as others, however, unless I receive a letter of rejection from universities for some other reason, I will never let anything destroy my hope". I agree that it is hard for me but for all the effort and hard work I have done, I believe I deserve to be a student in a quality university. Now that I am a senior, I cannot believe what I have accomplished in the past three years was so successful. I want to say thank you to my family, my teacher, my school, and even counselor because they have been trying so hard to help me attaining my aspirations.
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