Posts by REHAIMI

REHAIMI

May 29, 2011

Letters / Motivation Letter for Swiss Student Visa (International Hospitality Management) [4]

Thanks "EF_Susan" i really appreciate your reply :)

well the family is in the Hotel Business... its a pretty small property though.. but very equipped, what would be a good way to mention it im having trouble forming the sentence

so far I've got..
improvement of the family business and help maintain our high standards to become the top Hotel providers

but how else could i put it??

Thanks :)

REHAIMI

May 28, 2011

Undergraduate / Business Transfer Essay (Finance major) - Professional Statement [3]

I just have a few suggestions, a few rewordings to make it sound a bit more professional rather than casual talk.
again these are just suggestions, whether you go through with the changes or not is entirely up to u.

I am applying to be a Finance major at the UIUC College of Business because I strongly believe it is the best way for me to gain the preparation I need

It pains me every time I see someone make a poor choice related to the use of their funds. Being ~~filthy~~very rich and having ~~a large~~substantial sums in a bank account might not make a person happy.

I was excited when I realized there was a job for people like meMyself who enjoyed assisting others in their financial matters.

I recognize that ~~transitions like those~~such transitions are ~~such~~ enormous life changes that they can be stressful enough without financial issues to compound problems, so I would be happy to ~~give them a little less to worry about.~~take part in reducing their worries.~~It would be fulfilling to know that my clients were getting their needs met and achieving more success because of me.~~

The reason i took out the last sentance was because you have previously stated that you like to help others with their financial problems. theres no need to restate it.

but over all... i personaly enjoyed reading this.. and i trully wish u all the best of luck, i hope your able to follow ur dreams and reach your goals.

Good Luck!!

REHAIMI

May 28, 2011

Letters / Motivation Letter for Swiss Student Visa (International Hospitality Management) [4]

Dear All, I am Applying to a swiss university in Switzerland and need to submit a letter to the Swiss embassy stating why i have chosen to study in Switzerland and what my future plans are. I appreciate your feed back...

Thanks.
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To whom it may concern.

I am Writing to apply for a student visa, to further continue my BSc in International Hospitality Management at Ecole Hoteliere de Lausanne.

The reason I have chosen to complete my education in Switzerland is because of my ambition to develop myself and skills, in the leading country for hospitality, and through the leading school of hospitality; Ecole Hoteliere de Lausanne.

I look forward to taking on new challenges, and take pleasure in interacting and working with people who come from a wide range of backgrounds and cultures, as Ecole Hoteliere de Lausanne offers.

Upon completing my education, I intend to further develop myself and pursue a Masters Degree in Quality Management, to be able to help in the continues improvement of the family business and help maintain our high standards.

Furthermore, I, XXX, promise to be at my best behavior and to abide by the rules and regulations of Switzerland during my period of study at Ecole Hoteliere de Lausanne.

Thank You.

Yours sincerely,

XXXXX
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