KwSalem
Jun 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / My Essay on the Advantages and the Disadvantages of Studying Abroad [4]
Nowadays, there are many people prefer to study abroad for different reasons. However, many people do not prefer that. There are many advantages and disadvantages of it. I am going to talk about it.
On the one hand, some people who find some advantages of studying abroad. They can meet new type of people who have different culture that is variant about them. When they deal with those people, they will surely learn about their thoughts, beliefs and traditions. As a result, they many accept or refuse some those new traditions. When they deal with this kind of people they may admire some characters and finally be friends.
On the other hand, some people who see disadvantages of studying abroad may cause disturbance to them. They have their own reasons for that. They believe that it is not easy to quit their home and be away from friends. For them, they can not easily accept a new culture, so they may suffer a lot while being abroad. This kind of people usually agonise when tackling new sort of housing that is different from his own homeland.
To sum up, people are various, they are not the same in their way of thinking. What you like it, I may not like it ... etc.
Please, a teacher, can you check it and give me score like IELTS?
the Advantages and the Disadvantages of Studying Abroad
Nowadays, there are many people prefer to study abroad for different reasons. However, many people do not prefer that. There are many advantages and disadvantages of it. I am going to talk about it.
On the one hand, some people who find some advantages of studying abroad. They can meet new type of people who have different culture that is variant about them. When they deal with those people, they will surely learn about their thoughts, beliefs and traditions. As a result, they many accept or refuse some those new traditions. When they deal with this kind of people they may admire some characters and finally be friends.
On the other hand, some people who see disadvantages of studying abroad may cause disturbance to them. They have their own reasons for that. They believe that it is not easy to quit their home and be away from friends. For them, they can not easily accept a new culture, so they may suffer a lot while being abroad. This kind of people usually agonise when tackling new sort of housing that is different from his own homeland.
To sum up, people are various, they are not the same in their way of thinking. What you like it, I may not like it ... etc.
Please, a teacher, can you check it and give me score like IELTS?
