byxvera
Jun 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL_A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high [5]
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ajit88rai
Thanks for advice. ：）
byxvera
Jun 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL_A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high [5]
A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
As the French writer Voltaire said "work banishes those great evils: boredom, vice and poverty". Thus, it is clear that both leisure time and compensation are pivotal in making a decision of occupation. However, the definition of happiness compels me to choose a job with more leisure time without any hesitation.
It is true that a high-paying job allows people to gain more money to ensure a more comfortable and worry-free life. With a high income, people can afford delicious foods, live in comfortable housing and purchase expensive commodities. In addition, earning a high income also wins recognition, respect and admiration from others, which is why doctors and lawyers are among the most respected jobs in the world.
Nevertheless, if people choose a less strenuous job with more vacation time, they would become physically healthier and emotionally healthier. For example, on their holiday, they can play sports or enjoy more recreation and amusement which are the elements of a happy life leading to less stress and tension. In contrast, those people who have a high salary but less vacation time may often focus too much on meetings, sales targets or contracts, etc. Hence they ignore their physical and mental health, but are overwhelmed by high pressure instead.
What's more, the relationship between a person and his family members will be much improved as he chooses a job with more vacation time because he has more time to join in family activities such as picnicking or camping. Consequently, intimate relationships will prevent recurrent problems such as divorce which is always associated with a lack of communication. For children, additionally, the absence of one parent can exert a deeply negative effect on their development. The child might question his own value to the father or mother and develop low self-esteem. Neither lavish pocket money nor expensive gifts could compensate for lack of love or improper guidance. The majority of parents would not abandon their children in this way.
By comparing these two types of working conditions, one would easily see which is better. Despite some workaholics or some people who are able to find an excellent balance between life and work, most people such as I would rather sacrifice salary for personal time for those reasons.
A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
As the French writer Voltaire said "work banishes those great evils: boredom, vice and poverty". Thus, it is clear that both leisure time and compensation are pivotal in making a decision of occupation. However, the definition of happiness compels me to choose a job with more leisure time without any hesitation.
It is true that a high-paying job allows people to gain more money to ensure a more comfortable and worry-free life. With a high income, people can afford delicious foods, live in comfortable housing and purchase expensive commodities. In addition, earning a high income also wins recognition, respect and admiration from others, which is why doctors and lawyers are among the most respected jobs in the world.
Nevertheless, if people choose a less strenuous job with more vacation time, they would become physically healthier and emotionally healthier. For example, on their holiday, they can play sports or enjoy more recreation and amusement which are the elements of a happy life leading to less stress and tension. In contrast, those people who have a high salary but less vacation time may often focus too much on meetings, sales targets or contracts, etc. Hence they ignore their physical and mental health, but are overwhelmed by high pressure instead.
What's more, the relationship between a person and his family members will be much improved as he chooses a job with more vacation time because he has more time to join in family activities such as picnicking or camping. Consequently, intimate relationships will prevent recurrent problems such as divorce which is always associated with a lack of communication. For children, additionally, the absence of one parent can exert a deeply negative effect on their development. The child might question his own value to the father or mother and develop low self-esteem. Neither lavish pocket money nor expensive gifts could compensate for lack of love or improper guidance. The majority of parents would not abandon their children in this way.
By comparing these two types of working conditions, one would easily see which is better. Despite some workaholics or some people who are able to find an excellent balance between life and work, most people such as I would rather sacrifice salary for personal time for those reasons.
byxvera
Jun 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth watching agree [3]
Fervent lovers of movies may disagree that only movies which can teach us about real life are worthwhile. Even the super movie stars might immediately be put in a dilemma since some of them are pursuing involvement in diverse kinds of movies. And the screenwriters, having written the scenario involving fevered imagination, have to worry about their fame theoretically. Actually, the statement that only realistic movies are worthwhile is too implausible.
Documentaries are supposed to be the most realistic movie genre since they depict the historical events or the real aspects of nature. The movie Nanook of the North shoot by Robert. J. Flaherty in 1922, milestone of the development of documentaries, records the original life of the Nanooks and was praised as the truest and most human story of the great white snows. Robert. J. Flaherty captured the struggles of the Inuk Nanook together with his family and acquaints us with another world. This significant movie fulfilled an essential purpose of the documentary, which is education.
Admittedly, realistic movies teach us lessons, yet some unrealistic movies like the Harry Potter series are globally popular since they are not worthless at all. The magic world was completely conceived by J.K. Rowling but outstanding courage and warm friendships of the characters were profoundly contagious. Undoubtedly, the movie teaches us moral lessons in thought-provoking ways.
Furthermore, the reasons people watch movies are complicated and yet promote the development of the movie industry. Comedies act as companions offering us opportunities to escape from reality just for a couple of hours especially for those people who are extremely busy and under high pressure. Additionally, some movies show us different fresh ways to understand humanity, the world or the relationships among people. Audiences enjoy diverse kinds of movies according to their own tastes, but all of us tend to find our own screen companions no matter whether they are realistic or not.
The definition of a worthwhile movie varies from person to person. That is why I do not agree with the opinion that only those movies from which we can learn about real life are worth seeing.
Fervent lovers of movies may disagree that only movies which can teach us about real life are worthwhile. Even the super movie stars might immediately be put in a dilemma since some of them are pursuing involvement in diverse kinds of movies. And the screenwriters, having written the scenario involving fevered imagination, have to worry about their fame theoretically. Actually, the statement that only realistic movies are worthwhile is too implausible.
Documentaries are supposed to be the most realistic movie genre since they depict the historical events or the real aspects of nature. The movie Nanook of the North shoot by Robert. J. Flaherty in 1922, milestone of the development of documentaries, records the original life of the Nanooks and was praised as the truest and most human story of the great white snows. Robert. J. Flaherty captured the struggles of the Inuk Nanook together with his family and acquaints us with another world. This significant movie fulfilled an essential purpose of the documentary, which is education.
Admittedly, realistic movies teach us lessons, yet some unrealistic movies like the Harry Potter series are globally popular since they are not worthless at all. The magic world was completely conceived by J.K. Rowling but outstanding courage and warm friendships of the characters were profoundly contagious. Undoubtedly, the movie teaches us moral lessons in thought-provoking ways.
Furthermore, the reasons people watch movies are complicated and yet promote the development of the movie industry. Comedies act as companions offering us opportunities to escape from reality just for a couple of hours especially for those people who are extremely busy and under high pressure. Additionally, some movies show us different fresh ways to understand humanity, the world or the relationships among people. Audiences enjoy diverse kinds of movies according to their own tastes, but all of us tend to find our own screen companions no matter whether they are realistic or not.
The definition of a worthwhile movie varies from person to person. That is why I do not agree with the opinion that only those movies from which we can learn about real life are worth seeing.
