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gkivermhalinfro   
Jun 29, 2011
Writing Feedback / How I Spent My Inheritance [3]

It's an alright essay but nothing great. Maybe writing about a life changing experience would be better or expand upon how this experience affected you in a negative/positive way and how you changed from this experience, etc.

Also, the part where you explain that you just randomly decided to go to Japan, the transition, doesn't seem right. It's kind of awkward. there seems to be a lot of unnecessary details. Maybe you could focus on one thing that happened while you were in Japan.
gkivermhalinfro   
Jun 29, 2011
Undergraduate / Applicant Whatever: Why should MIT admit me? [4]

Why should MIT admit me?

Applicant: Whatever
Blah blah blah blah. And some more blah blah blah. There's Sherlock Holmes, the guy who can solve any crime mystery. Eminem, the lyrical genius who overcame his drug problems. George Carlin, famous for his political, social, and economic views. Chris Gardner, the typical rags to riches guy. John Nash a Nobel Prize winner whose work has impacted market economics, computing, artificial intelligence. Vladamir Reznov, the robot communist guy who'll stay up for 4 days straight working on a project. There's Gatsby, Iron Man, Holden Caulfield, Martin Luther King Jr., Michael Phelps, Tiger Woods, Ghandi, Bobby Funke, James Bond, Kobe Bryant, Feliks Zemdegs, Russell Peters, my cousin with down syndrome, Tyler Durden, and Rodney, the random guy who turns out to actually be smart. There's greatness. And then there's me. The guy who has no achievements on his resume because he couldn't even get enough c/d credits to satisfy his honor society requirements. Who doesn't have the courage to cheat on every test and copy ever H.W. in order to get that 98 average. The guy who just doesn't feel like entering any competitions. The insecure kid who's afraid of something as low as the future. The guy who stays at home all day and stares at a computer for 3 hours and can't even think of a decent essay topic and ends up writing this. The guy who doesn't know how to be social, act, program a hello, teach, write, swim, run, play, win a local spelling B, take a test, solve a problem, or even get into a decent college There's greatness, and then there's me. The guy who knows how to think for himself. The guy who wastes an hour or two thinking of his email username. The guy who spends looking through a microscope eye piece at the same thing. The guy who tries new things. Greatness is overrated. So why not admit me?

You decide.
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