Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay "Our need for friendship may be greater than ever" [4]

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Our need for friendship may be greater than ever, simply because our lives are so challenging and full.

Nothing can make us feel worse about ourselves that the conviction that we do not deserved to be loved, and one of the strongest factors, could generate this conviction is the feeling that we miss friends. In our jampacked lives it is really difficult to find time to sustain friendship, thereafter our need for friends may be greater than ever.

Isn't it really wonderful to be blessed with people who accept you as you are? But today, when life has become faster, it is not easy to juggle friendship with a job, a busy family life, and commitments to church, studying, and community. My uncle is a director of one of engineering companies. Once he shared with me his experience about friendship in our busy time:"It is difficult to combine friendship and business relationships. In this case whether friendship damages job or relationships boss-employee damages friendship. And I just haven't enough time to sustain friendship out of job." Maybe portion of hypocrisy in our society has raised and often positions may simply not allow people to behave as they are all the time. Perhaps these circumstances may raise a value of friendship as a rare resource in modern world.

In other respects true friends are precious medium for thoughts, emotions and wise pieces of advice. Good friends may be not only people, who comfortable to be with, but those who could motivate person, could force her to level herself up. Friends may be a strong power, lead us to success. So if there is the subject of really universal interest today it is the art of making and sustaining good friends. I've always considered myself as a lucky man, blessed with people, able to give me a new aims, encourage me to new accomplishments. Thus there is a part of my friends in all of my successes.

Finally human historically is a social creature. Friends save us in our dangers. Friends guide when we are perplexed. We may feel relieved when we tell our sorrow to a friend. A true friend is our asset. Friends share our sorrow and redouble our joy. When we are in pain and agony our friends soothe us.

The more I have looked at my own life honestly and the more friends I have had, the more convinced I am that having friends is a marvellous gift, could help find a right answers for your life.